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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 21:34, 4 April 2016 (UTC)

I remember reading about this on the news back in the day. Never played Eve, but I love space MMOs and always wanted to play it! I'll have this finished soon. JAGUAR  21:34, 4 April 2016 (UTC)

≠===Initial comments===

  • "and was possibly the largest player versus player battle ever" - don't know if this is just me, but I thought that "ever" sounds a bit informal or unenecyclopedic to use. How about something like {{xt|in history}}?
  • "Eve Online is a space game in which players engage" - needs mentioning that it is an MMORPG too; {{xt|Eve Online is a MMORPG space game in which players engage}}
  • "and so deployed their entire Capital Fleet to the system" - should capital fleet be capitalised here? I could be wrong, so feel free to ignore this
  • "and the game's time dilation software kicked in" - informal, try {{xt|initiated}}
  • "as the biggest and most expensive in EVE Online's history" - needs italicisation
  • "Dr. Eyjólfur Guðmundsson, an economist hired by CCP Games to oversee EVE Online's economy" - again, this needs to be italicised
  • "Pandemic Legion withdrew from the Southeast theater and struck a deal with the CFC" - bit informal, how about just {{xt|made a deal}}
  • "Once the game went into downtime, developer CCP Games" - de-link CCP Games, as it already has been linked before
  • [http://www.pcgamer.com/2014/01/28/eve-onlines-biggest-ever-battle-trillions-of-isk-in-damages-and-over-70-titans-lost/ Ref 7] and [http://www.pcgamer.com/2014/01/30/ccp-issue-final-battle-report-on-eve-onlines-most-destructive-battle-will-erect-permanent-memorial/ ref 15] are both dead. Need archiving
  • [http://dispenser.homenet.org/~dispenser/cgi-bin/dablinks.py?page=Bloodbath_of_B-R5RB No dab links]

I'll leave this on hold until all of the above have been addressed. It was an interesting read! I wish I could get Eve Online. {{icon|GAH}} JAGUAR  17:59, 6 April 2016 (UTC)

::I addressed all of these issues. Thanks!--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 02:17, 7 April 2016 (UTC)

:::Thanks! This looks good to go now. {{icon|GA}} JAGUAR  17:18, 7 April 2016 (UTC)