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I've listed this article for peer review because after being nominated as a Good Article and fixing the prose, I feel it could meet the FA Criteria. But I also think that it needs a good peer review to avoid any prose issues being brought up at FAC. In all honesty, I feel I wrote this better than SummerSlam (2003) :).

Thanks, S_RX 22:44, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

Image comments as requested. Mostly seems fine, just the one thing; what good does having an image of the DVD cover do, and thus, why is it necessary? (It's FUR doesn't help convince me.) Giggy (talk) 23:05, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

:How about now?--S_RX 23:16, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

::Still not seeing it. The first part of the FUR can be done with text ("there were different people on the covers"). The second part is non-existent, as far as I can see. Giggy (talk) 23:26, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

:::I just removed it, I will let it get deleted as an orphaned image.--S_RX 23:32, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

{{Hidden|titlestyle = background-color: DodgerBlue;|Resolved comments from ThinkBlue|content=Background

• Background
• This is me, but this sounds off ---> "called the Hell in a Cell".
• Reworded it to "dubbed as the Hell in a Cell match" in the process removing the comma.--S_RX 23:28, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
• Add a hyphen between "non-physical".
• Done.--S_RX 23:28, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
• Main event matches
• "officiate pinfall" is it missing "the"?
• Done.--S_RX 23:28, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
• Aftermath
• Shawn did not win the WH title at SummerSlam.
• I was thinking about Survivor Series (2002). Fixed.--S_RX 23:28, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

Here's my comments. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 23:22, 19 September 2008 (UTC)}}

Comments from {{User|Ealdgyth}}

• You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, so I looked at the sourcing and referencing with that in mind. I reviewed the article's sources as I would at FAC.
• MOS says no all capitals in link titles in references
• Really picky, but current ref 25, should be seating chart, not seatin chart.

: Hope this helps. Please note that I don't watchlist Peer Reviews I've done. If you have a question about something, you'll have to drop a note on my talk page to get my attention. (My watchlist is already WAY too long, adding peer reviews would make things much worse.) 12:56, 22 September 2008 (UTC)

:All done.--S_RX 20:37, 22 September 2008 (UTC)

;Comments from {{user|Juliancolton}}

• All wrestlers were from the Raw brand - a storyline division in which WWE assigned it's employees to a different program, the other being SmackDown!. Change the hyphen to an en dash.

::What is the wikicode for an endash? I searched it but couldn't find it.--S_RX 21:00, 25 September 2008 (UTC)

• The contests would include a belching contest, a "pie" eating contest, and a singing contest. Why does "pie" link to Crotch? And why are they eating it in a contest? O_O

::I explained that better.--S_RX 21:00, 25 September 2008 (UTC)

• After Sunday Night Heat, the pay-per-view began with a tag team match where the Dudley Boyz (D-Von [Devon Hughes] and Bubba Ray ([Mark LoMonaco]) faced Rodney Mack (Rodney Begnaud) and Christopher Nowinski in a singles match. Confusing. Where does the parenthesis end?

–Juliancolton ^{Tropical Cyclone}

::Fixed, there was an extra one.S_RX 21:00, 25 September 2008 (UTC)