Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 March 1

Hello,

I understand that there are a lot of immature individuals out there that abuse Wikipedia by using their own ideas and place them as fictional statements for their own enjoyment under different profile works. I have been for sometime now editing assorted Wiz Khalifa (Guest appearances, Videos & Tours) while there being no protection for the page. I have then as of today (2/28/11) decided to create an account for Wikipedia with hopes of continuing to edit this page.

• My next edit would be:

|"Young, Wild & Free"

|Snoop Dogg featuring Wiz Khalifa

|High School

Thank you.

EBonanni90 (talk) 00:25, 1 March 2011 (UTC)

:Replied at Wikipedia:Help desk#Wanting to edit Wiz Khalifa. PrimeHunter (talk) 00:36, 1 March 2011 (UTC)

How do I get the article reviewed so that it is "officially" on Wikipedia?

Goldy1322 (talk) 13:33, 1 March 2011 (UTC)

Please review Patrick Curry biography as was deleted once for some reason and I have reentered. Contact me if any problems re source etc and I will provide any further information necessary.

Anne Pennington 14:40, 1 March 2011 (UTC)

• Why was it deleted the first time? —ASPENSTI—TALK—CONTRIBUTIONS 02:06, 2 March 2011 (UTC)

:Ok, please provide the necessary further information. See Wikipedia:Notability (people). Are there any secondary sources you can use to show your subject is "notable" in the Wikipedia sense? You should also look at Wikipedia:Notability (academics). Even though it may seem obvious that the subject is "notable" you have to express the basis and supply verifying references. Because the subject is still alive, you should also review Wikipedia:Biographies of living persons. Where there is no kind of statement suggesting notability, it is not unusual for articles to be deleted. I cleaned up some of the formatting issues, but like the flags said, you should review the Manual of Style and try to make your article conform. Please review your first sentence. Not only is the listing of the elements unclear, but it just ends in meaningless jargon. This fellow looks like a plausible subject for an article, and you have a decent start, but work needs to be done. Tkotc (talk) 04:24, 2 March 2011 (UTC)

I'm a first-time user of Wikipedia, and I'm modeling my article on other CMU psychology faculty pages which were accepted and are live. Also, I need to rename the page Sheldon Cohen to remove the middle initial, but I don't know how. I did create a blank page called Sheldon Cohen but don't know how to put my stuff there. If accepted, we are ready to make it go live.

SheldonCohen (talk) 15:24, 1 March 2011 (UTC)

• Please provide a link to your article —ASPENSTI—TALK—CONTRIBUTIONS 02:07, 2 March 2011 (UTC)

• I believe your article is Sheldon Cohen -- is that correct? Are you that Sheldon Cohen? If so, I'm surprised you didn't proofread your article! There is an extraneous boldfaced heading. After the subject's name is originally stated, the Wikipedia convention is to refer to him without honorifics, using surname only, for the balance of the article. It would be best as a matter of convention to put his DOB in parentheses after his name in the lead paragraph. There are educational institutions that may be Wikilinked to their Wikipedia articles. Empty sections may be deleted. Only one blank line is needed between sections. Thank you for providing nicely formatted references to the subject's works. At the time the article is moved into "mainspace", the name can be adjusted. In Wikipedia, there really isn't a "rename"; things get renamed by being "moved". Thank you for your contribution. Tkotc (talk) 04:41, 2 March 2011 (UTC)

I'm a first time user of Wikipedia and am requesting that this page be reviewed for acceptability. If acceptable, I'd like to take it live if possible. Thank you.

SheldonCohen (talk) 15:26, 1 March 2011 (UTC)

Please help with feedback on how to make the article more neutral so that it won't be deleted. Thank you.

Superdeed (talk) 16:34, 1 March 2011 (UTC)

Developed page covering the Army's Medical Center and School. Want to make sure it's suitable for publishing.

Malloryab (talk) 16:51, 1 March 2011 (UTC)

• I think it reads pretty good. Make it live and see where it goes —ASPENSTI—TALK—CONTRIBUTIONS 02:11, 2 March 2011 (UTC)

I'd like to get some feedback on this article. I know it needs some more references, but I would like it if some more people could contribute. I have found all that I can but maybe someone else can find more!

Thank you very much!

Also I will probably be starting some LMT pages soon, as well as some other defense industry pages, so if anyone else is interested in contributing please let me know.

Littlemslawandorder (talk) 19:50, 1 March 2011 (UTC)

:I think your references should be expanded and formatted a bit differently. For example, even though you have made the PDF available, it would make the importance of it immediately apparent if the publication data (name of publication, etc.) were obvious. Also the Janes could probably be elaborated upon. The second thing is how the references are used and placed in the article, just hanging in whitespace at the end of varous sections. I will hazard a guess that most of the information in the sections came from the sources you referenced. In that case, maybe if you had an introductory sentence to the effect that "some source noted the following qualities or facts", it might be clearer how the reference verifies what you wrote. I wonder if there is a better way to format what are essentially long lists of facts. The article looks strange with the long series of short paragraphs, but I don't know that list formatting would be better. Just something to think about. The list of countries that use the weapon would probably be better done as a list. See M60 machine gun as a possible example (and also because you will want a wikilink to the article). The best way to get others to collaborate is to write a successful, survivable article and get it into mainspace. Thank you for the contribution. Tkotc (talk) 05:31, 2 March 2011 (UTC)

Wanted to make sure this article complies with Wikipedia's standards, and am looking for general editing and feedback on the page.

Fredgeorgejones (talk) 23:02, 1 March 2011 (UTC)

how soon will i be able to google my article?

English is not my native tongue. Are there any grammar/style errors?

Olistiy (talk) 23:32, 1 March 2011 (UTC)

• I listed it on this page so that someone who speaks both languages can fix it. —ASPENSTI—TALK—CONTRIBUTIONS 02:28, 2 March 2011 (UTC)