Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 October 5

New page for former Olympic swimmer Svetlana Vanyo.

Wikibv21 (talk) 01:35, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Kindly review and let me know what needs work. Thanks!

Kf0623 (talk) 02:53, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

: Looks promising, I will review and leave some feedback. W Nowicki (talk) 20:51, 6 October 2011 (UTC)

Thank you!

continued Mr and Mrs. Benjamin Randolph Banks from Richmond, Va. adopted me through my dad being in the navy working for a three star admiral at the time who helped him adopt me from Seoul Korea. Admiral John Highland. Please let my Golden Child story unfold with the truth justice should be told through only telling the truth. Thank You , and the adoption agencies name again in Holt Adoption Agency , my name when I was given there was Marry Kwon and from the An Dong Kwon Family. My adoptee name was changed to Monica Kwon Banks. my email is monybanks123@yahoo.com thank you for your time and research in order for me to possibly be put into Wakapedia. Sincerely, Monica kwon Banks'

Pleasea e-mail me if you need any further information or requests.--Monybanks123 (talk) 07:23, 5 October 2011 (UTC)--Monybanks123 (talk) 07:23, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Monybanks123 (talk) 07:23, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

New page Indiola, Oregon

Visitor7 (talk) 08:12, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

New page Tide, Oregon

Visitor7 (talk) 08:29, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Can you review the article - Global Reach Partners please?

Mchart89 (talk) 09:13, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi,

I've added a biography of someone and would like to get it reviewed for style, content and formatting.

Many thanks,

89.194.19.166 (talk) 09:43, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

There already is a page about student union in Sundsvall in Swedish. I tried to createa page in English. I myself am a member of the board of the Student Union in Sundsvall and tried to be neutral in my comments and texts. The information validity can be asked by emailing the president or the vice president of the union:

Joachim Sjövall

ordf@sks.miun.se

Diana Krantz

vice@sks.miun.se

Thank you

Reza.moossavi (talk) 10:48, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Could somebody give me some feedback on my article (it's about network monitoring software).

I'm writing it since almost 6 months. It was my first wiki article and I made some mistakes.

Last time I moved it form my user space without waiting for review and I was punished for that.

Could somebody help me ?

Timeport101 (talk) 11:02, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Left some comments on your talk page. Still need clear evidence of coverage by a reliable independent source. W Nowicki (talk) 20:51, 6 October 2011 (UTC)

Sandker (talk) 12:57, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

An artice introducing Air Traffic Management Training Academy in Malmoe, Sweden.

Inesa2011 (talk) 13:52, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

new entry for feedback

99.180.203.160 (talk) 15:53, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

approve his page

223.180.132.93 (talk) 16:11, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi, I am writing to ensure I follow the proper protocol for requesting an article. I put a request on the "Requested articles" page and then included a few references, a disclosure statement about my relationship to the org, and a little bit of info in this temporary workspace. Can you confirm that I've taken the appropriate steps, let me know if there are changes I need to make, etc? I want to be sure to follow the appropriate rules for getting an article included about an organization, while being respectful of the third-party element of that. Thanks for your help.

Wmetz (talk) 16:11, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Replaced an identical article with this one in order to add the accent over the "e" in the name.

LynneQuarmby (talk) 17:56, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

LUCIFER were an elusive rock band from the early 1970's and it's recently been established that it was the solo work of Denys Irving, with financial assistance from Howard Marks (see his autobiography 'Mr Nice' pages 38, 104, 144/145).

Luciferfan (talk) 20:11, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Hello,

Could someone please review this page when they get the chance, and then remove the "unreviewed article" tag? Thank you!

Yardslippers (talk) 20:28, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Hello, I'm trying to create an article about Enomatic and I'm sincerly willing to do it according Wikipedia criteria. I don't understand the Speedy Detection, what is the problem at the moment, as the page hasn't been put online. I'd like to get a review of my article and discuss the issues that you may encounter, especially for I'm writing about a company. So please, if you could review my article and give me some advice, I'll be happy to follow them. Try not to block me before we try to solve the problem together. Thanks!Arseguet (talk) 16:35, 5 October 2011 (UTC)Arseguet (talk) 16:30, 5 October 2011 (UTC) Arseguet

Arseguet (talk) 20:52, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Would like some feedback on the article as it's currently written. Suggestions for what to add, or how to make it better.

Wiedenu (talk) 21:11, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Belinda.ryan (talk) 22:39, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

I created the page Frank Doggett because he was referenced on other Wikipedia pages without a link and I felt readers might benefit by having specific information about him/his work. I had collected resource material about him over the years and, of course, knew him well as his son. In addition to feedback regarding how the article might be improved upon, I would like to get the "new unreviewed article" template removed. Thank you.

1bluemoon (talk) 23:03, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Need some help cleaning this up. Not sure how to proceed.

Ian Weir 23:13, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Need some help cleaning this up. Not sure how to proceed.

Ian Weir 23:14, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Need some help cleaning this up. Not sure how to proceed.

Ian Weir 23:18, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Please review article, thanks!

Jcooper1 (talk) 00:13, 6 October 2011 (UTC)

new page

Visitor7 (talk) 00:29, 6 October 2011 (UTC)

This article has been enlarged and rewritten including a military campaign infobox and replaces the coverage of this action which had been in the Sinai and Palestine Campaign article. An introduction and link to the Capture of Jericho article has been included in the Sinai and Palestine Campaign article.

Rskp (talk) 05:17, 6 October 2011 (UTC)

:{{approved|Reviewed by}} Ma®©usBritish ^{[Chat • RFF]} 15:12, 10 October 2011 (UTC)

::*Looks very good, your experience shows - I have done some very minor copy-edits, and reviewed in under WP:MILHIST criteria as {{icon|B}}-class - see the articles talk page for details on the {{tl|MILHIST}} scope and rating. If you want to see if it qualifies as {{icon|A}}-class, please see Military History for ACR. Thanks!

::Thanks a lot - much appreciated. I plan to nominate it for a GA (I've found the process is a lot less of a hassle than trying for ACRs) --Rskp (talk) 00:00, 11 October 2011 (UTC)

"Charles Drain, Oregon" is a new page that needs a look. An earlier page, "Charles Drain," describes a politician from Canada, so it would help if someone could disambiguate the Charles Drains. This would hopefully allow us to drop the "Oregon" from my new page title. I have referenced a third Charles Drain, builder of the Charles and Anna Drain house, who should be included in the disambiguation at some point.

Visitor7 (talk) 07:20, 6 October 2011 (UTC)

new page

Visitor7 (talk) 08:05, 6 October 2011 (UTC)

Created article based on sources online. I do not know the subject personally but have come to admire his talent and ambitions.

Keyofz (talk) 14:02, 6 October 2011 (UTC)

Would just like to know how to add a picture to the article? Thanks in advance, Leekgb.

Leekgb (talk) 14:20, 6 October 2011 (UTC)

Article on the new Michael Jackson remix album. A review much appreciated.

Kochas (talk) 15:20, 6 October 2011 (UTC)