Wikipedia:WikiProject Germany/Collaboration

This battle was listed under the general heading of "things you can do" for people in the Germany project. Battle of Breitenfeld (1631). So I clicked on it and found this list of problems.

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I attacked the article, and rewrote significant parts using the three books I have on the topic: Wedgewood, Parker, and Meade. I've taken it as far as I can in terms of content. Someone else will have to approach the military issues that remain.

• specifics of the battle, details, etc. beyond what I have. Did the Saxons fully desert in the first moments of battle? The original article cited text from 1632 to support this, but 1632, however well researched, is still a piece of fiction.

• although I know that generally Gustav was a very competent general, and an innovative tactical and operations guy, the article needs a better analysis of his innovations: by better, I mean more balanced, and less impressed with the Lion of the North.

• I suggest, also, that the Order of Battle page be "moved" (or whatever) to here to better look like the articles about other battles. I'm happy to copy edit later....--Auntieruth55 (talk) 18:01, 7 June 2009 (UTC)

that said, I'm happy to copy edit when someone has done some more work on this.