Wikipedia:WikiProject Guild of Copy Editors/Requests#Climate of Argentina

This article is overly long and has too much detail culled from documentaries about the band. I looked at this but I think it needs an expert look at it before I continue with adding further references. Karst (talk) 11:27, 18 February 2025 (UTC)

:{{Working}} Miniapolis 13:35, 22 April 2025 (UTC)

Hello, I am requesting a copy edit for this article to improve its grammar, style, and readability.

The article covers the Japanese occupation of West Sumatra, officially known as Sumatora Nishi Kaigan Shū, from 1942 to 1945, detailing how the region was governed under Japanese military rule and later civilian administration. It explores the unique case of West Sumatra, where a civilian governor, Yano Kenzo, was appointed instead of direct military control, which was rare in occupied Indonesia. Key topics include Japanese governance, the role of Minangkabau leaders, the formation of Indonesia’s first military units (Giyūgun), and the transition from occupation to independence.

Additionally, it examines economic collapse within the region, forced labour (Rōmusha), and interactions between the Japanese and local communities. It also examines tensions and infighting within the Japanese Imperial Army and its apparatus, and Japanese plans for Sumatra in the long-run and it's aftermath. The article also discusses the strategic importance of West Sumatra in Japan’s defensive planning and the differing approaches taken in Sumatra compared to Java during the occupation.

I have done my best to ensure historical accuracy, but a peer review by user Chipmunkdavis recommended seeking copy-editing assistance. Since the article includes detailed historical analysis, improving clarity and flow while maintaining neutrality is my main priority.

Any help would be greatly appreciated! Thank you in advance. Kaliper1 (talk) 11:59, 20 February 2025 (UTC)

:{{Working}} EricXXue (talk) 19:20, 14 April 2025 (UTC)

::{{Not done}}: lost my work due to a bug EricXXue (talk) 22:11, 14 April 2025 (UTC)

Contains lot of POV pushing. Many sentences need to be rewritten. Thilsebatti (talk) 01:55, 25 February 2025 (UTC)

Rewrite article per wiki standards, article seems to have a negative viewpoint instead of neutral and seems to have too many references. Also it has original research. DareshMohan (talk) 03:21, 27 February 2025 (UTC)

:@DareshMohan: Checking for OR, POV, and references are not part of copy editing. Copy editors work on style, structure, tone, and grammar. voorts (talk/contributions) 00:39, 15 March 2025 (UTC)

I read through this article and I feel that it contains a lot of very unencyclopic writing, overtly analyzing the band's imagery and the discussion of the band from a political standpoint doesn't seem to have much bearing on the readers' understanding of the subject, nor does, for example, the comment made by one of the band members about which men he allegedly has sex with. Can someone go through this article and lift out the less encyclopedic parts? Also, can someone add some more information about how they formed, how were their first shows received, how were their albums received, how the band in general has been received throughout the years (some of the comments on allegations of the band's political alliances can be moved around to areas of the biography where they would be more relevant), relevant activity of the band members, information on lineups during the band's existence or if it's always primarily been a solo vehicle for one man?

As it currently stands, the article doesn't deepen my understanding of the band. If someone wanted to research the band, I think that this article would not help anyone learn more about them, as I don't know any more about this band than when I first heard about them, and this article could be expanded and rewritten to give a more scholarly overview of their history and reception, as it currently reads to me like an article written by fans that doesn't really give much substantive information, and the way the little information in the article is presented, I think that it would not be helpful to readers who are not deeply familiar with the band. For example, I was left confused as to why the article discusses the band having alleged fascist leanings but also says that one of the members was kicked out of the group because he joined a fascist political party and tried to bring his politics into the band? It doesn't explain whether the band's leader had a political shift overtime or if he was using fascist imagery for shock value. Regardless, I don't really see the relevance to the quote at the end about which men the one member of the group allegedly likes to have sex with, it doesn't seem like it's very relevant to the subject. LupinOnTheFritz (talk) 18:41, 2 March 2025 (UTC)

:{{re|LupinOnTheFritz}} Just to clarify, members of the Guild of Copyeditors are not obligated to add content to an article or find sources (copyeditors are free to do that if they wish, but they are not expected to do so). Regards, Grumpylawnchair (talk) 17:01, 5 March 2025 (UTC)

Article has already been promoted to GA since January 2025. Requesting PR (Peer Review) to maintain/further improve grammar and prose, per another editor's suggestion. Changedforbetter (talk) 18:11, 5 March 2025 (UTC)

:{{U|Changedforbetter}}: We will be happy to copy edit the article, but if you want to request an actual Peer Review, please see the instructions for doing so. – Jonesey95 (talk) 17:27, 6 March 2025 (UTC)

::@Jonesey95 sorry, I'm not entirely sure I'm familiar with the copy-editing process. I inputted PR because I thought it was the appropriate selection here; I must have misunderstood. If PR is not relevant, kindly ignore and proceed with a regular copyedit. Changedforbetter (talk) 19:40, 6 March 2025 (UTC)

Article needs to be copyedited. 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 05:44, 15 March 2025 (UTC)

Old FA, in need of a copy-edit. Harizotoh9 (talk) 10:15, 16 March 2025 (UTC)

Has been promoted to GA after nearly 8 months of wait, and now I am targeting for taking it to FAC. Vestrian24Bio 12:17, 16 March 2025 (UTC)

I plan on nominating Terraria for FAC. I only want the "Development and release" and "Reception" sections to be copyedited and made more engaging. I suggest following the instructions at MOS:VG. Vacant0 (talk • contribs) 13:34, 20 March 2025 (UTC)

Finished a major expansion and rewrite of this article, which I am hoping to take to FAC in the near future. It's a bit of a long read and dry at points, but I think I've ironed out the remaining issues. SounderBruce 08:05, 23 March 2025 (UTC)

For another GAN (the last one failed partially due to bad prose) Grumpylawnchair (talk) 16:20, 25 March 2025 (UTC)

Former GA that was demoted following a GAR. Would like to get this back to GA, with one of the main issues being the prose. Feels WP:POV and WP:FLOWERY. actuall7 (talk | contrib) 01:24, 5 April 2025 (UTC)

Over a period of time, I have expanded the article's content significantly. Other editors have been very helpful in correcting reference templates, grammar as well as making peer review comments. One of the suggestions from peer reveiw is that the article needs proper copy editing. I would love to be able to submit the article as a GAN or even FAC Best regards, LeChatiliers Pupper (talk) 21:27, 6 April 2025 (UTC)

Planning to nominate it for FAC sometime in the future. Specific problems include needing to remove video game jargon confusing to the average reader. Fix anything else you see too. Thanks. Tarlby ^{(t) (c)} 21:35, 7 April 2025 (UTC)

Needs general ce. Kailash29792 (talk) 09:04, 8 April 2025 (UTC)

:Rephrase the plot for readability. LΞVIXIUS💬 22:40, 8 April 2025 (UTC)

Someone please completely rewrite this article, just get it off my hands. Seems a bunch of high school students have copy-pasted their term end papers on it. LΞVIXIUS💬 20:27, 9 April 2025 (UTC)

Another FA that I made some changes to. Would appreciate a cleanup, thank you. LittleJerry (talk) 18:40, 10 April 2025 (UTC)

Needs to be copyedited. 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 10:43, 12 April 2025 (UTC)

Potential for GA.Tintor2 (talk) 03:52, 13 April 2025 (UTC)

Very ancient FA, and I'd like it to be in good shape to run on the centenary of her birth in 2029. Harizotoh9 (talk) 13:33, 14 April 2025 (UTC)

Potential for GA.Tintor2 (talk) 02:36, 18 April 2025 (UTC)

GA: prose needs improvement, redo some quoted text in your own words and improve comprehensability where possible, ty Chchcheckit (talk) 13:51, 19 April 2025 (UTC)

I need clean-up work on prose and grammar to nominate this article on FAC in the future. Santi (talk) 01:01, 20 April 2025 (UTC)

The same as above (my another nom). Santi (talk) 01:02, 20 April 2025 (UTC)

While this article on a battle of World War II was under ACR for the military history project, two reviewers suggested that there are many linguistic infelicities that have to be fixed and suggested that the article is copy-edited before its nomination is reconsidered. As I am not a native speaker of English and having failed to notice the problematic nature of some phrases and constructions that had already been in use in the article's text and pointed out as such by the reviewers, I thought I should follow their advice and address a request for a copy edit here before resubmitting the article for ACR. Your help would be greatly appreciated. Cheers, Ashmedai 119 (talk) 06:31, 20 April 2025 (UTC)

For a future FAC. Many sentences need to be simplified/made less complex; prose should have more concision too Elias 🦗🐜 ^{[Chat, they chattin', they chat]} 08:04, 21 April 2025 (UTC)

The Satan article is a GA article, but it is for quite a while now and might need a little cleansing, due to different edits over the past years. VenusFeuerFalle (talk) 21:21, 22 April 2025 (UTC)