Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Peer review/Jade (Beyond Good & Evil)

I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to push this article to Good article status and eventually Featured article status. Any advice would be very strongly appreciated, especially grammar-wise. Thanks! - The New Age Retro Hippie used Ruler! Now, he can figure out the length of things easily. 11:39, 16 January 2010 (UTC)

To begin, I have not played this game at all. So, this review is from an unbiased viewpoint. Some of the issues:

• the first reference's link is broken.
• I've added a weasel word template to an info. paragraph sentence
• Done. - The New Age Retro Hippie used Ruler! Now, he can figure out the length of things easily. 04:29, 22 January 2010 (UTC)
• The sentence after that has some confusion, who was taking care of the orphans? There are two people mentioned in the sentence.
• Done. - The New Age Retro Hippie used Ruler! Now, he can figure out the length of things easily. 04:29, 22 January 2010 (UTC)
• In the first sentence of the 2nd paragraph, there are what I believe are titles, after a two individual gaming sites. You should capitalize the titles and add quotations to make evident the titles.
• Done. - The New Age Retro Hippie used Ruler! Now, he can figure out the length of things easily. 04:29, 22 January 2010 (UTC)
• Next there is a mention to Kendra Midori who I believe is a character of James Cameron's Avatar but the wiki. link you provide is to a 1970's video game.
• Done. - The New Age Retro Hippie used Ruler! Now, he can figure out the length of things easily. 04:29, 22 January 2010 (UTC)

Well, that's all I can find for now. Sincerely Subzerosmokerain (talk) 00:29, 17 January 2010 (UTC)

:Additionally, I don't have any prior knowledge with:

:*what DomZ or Alpha Section is in the Appearances section. Who are the bad guys per se?

:*You might have to fluff out the Appearances section because it is looking a bit small compared to the rest of the article.

:*Also you should reference that section a bit with the Cite Video Game Template.

:**Unfortunately, I don't own the game, so I can't fill that in. I'll have to ask the person who added the section. - The New Age Retro Hippie used Ruler! Now, he can figure out the length of things easily. 04:29, 22 January 2010 (UTC)

:*The Jade (disambiguation) does not have a redirect to the article.

:**Done. - The New Age Retro Hippie used Ruler! Now, he can figure out the length of things easily. 04:29, 22 January 2010 (UTC)

:Fix those and I think you've pretty much fixed it. Sincerely Subzerosmokerain (talk) 21:48, 17 January 2010 (UTC)

• Overall it looks decent, however:
• Considering it's likely the Ubisoft template will be deleted, I would say that on NFCC grounds :File:Beyond Good & Evil Artwork Jade Version.png should probably be removed.
• That's probably true. I also wanted to find a character portrait of her that resembles the lead image. - The New Age Retro Hippie used Ruler! Now, he can figure out the length of things easily. 04:29, 22 January 2010 (UTC)
• As Subzero mentions, another paragraph could probably be added to the appearances section, or at the very least extra explanation as to who the DomZ, IRIS, alpha sections are.
• I'll make sure that gets done. - The New Age Retro Hippie used Ruler! Now, he can figure out the length of things easily. 04:29, 22 January 2010 (UTC)
• I'm not sure if you've done this, but a location for good character info would be digging through the game reviews (I see one is listed.) Since I'm working on Beyond Good & Evil, I'll see if other mentions crop up that should be included.
• I often look through reviews, but have not done it in this instance. - The New Age Retro Hippie used Ruler! Now, he can figure out the length of things easily. 04:29, 22 January 2010 (UTC)
• The lead goes into a bit too much detail on the ethnicity bit, methinks.
• Hrm, maybe. I think it needs some mention though, since it was a matter that received response from a developer. - The New Age Retro Hippie used Ruler! Now, he can figure out the length of things easily. 04:29, 22 January 2010 (UTC)
• The description in the infobox sounds more like alt text, and is a bit unnecessary in my opinion.
• I thought that alt text was suggested? - The New Age Retro Hippie used Ruler! Now, he can figure out the length of things easily. 04:29, 22 January 2010 (UTC)
• Alt text is suggested but what those images have are captions, captions don't need to be as descriptive as alt text. To create alt text for an image File:Beyond Good & Evil Artwork Jade Version.png. CrimsonFox ^talk 17:51, 24 January 2010 (UTC)

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