Talk:1971 San Fernando earthquake/GA1

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 15:16, 26 March 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 15:16, 26 March 2021 (UTC)

:{{u|Some Dude From North Carolina}}, Thanks for that. Take your time. Dawnseeker2000 19:30, 26 March 2021 (UTC)

• Couldn't find any issues with the infobox.
• I don't think the word "extraordinary" is neutral to use, so try replacing it. {{done}} I've replaced extraordinary with unprecedented. Maybe that will sound more in line with neutral wording.
• Other than that, the lead looks good.

• Remove the comma after "Channel Islands offshore". {{done}}

• Add a serial comma after "east–west strike". {{done}}
• I don't think "landsliding" is an actual word, so reword. {{done}}
• Add a comma after "the Tujunga segment". {{done}}
• "frequently-encountered" {{right arrow}} "frequently encountered" {{done}}

• "heart attack" {{right arrow}} "heart attacks" {{done}}
• Is "proper ties" the correct words being used, or is it a typo? {{done}} Yes, it's correct. I've linked Tie (engineering) to assist the reader.
• "The large" {{right arrow}} "A large" {{done}}
• Remove the comma after "closest school to Pacoima dam". {{done}}

• Add a comma after "Long Beach earthquake". {{done}}
• "debate began" {{right arrow}} "a debate began" {{done}}

• Sources are archived and well-cited. {{smiley}}