Talk:2003 Budweiser Shootout/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 07:32, 10 July 2019 (UTC)

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I will use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 11:18, 21 February 2018 (UTC)

{{tq|Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.}}

=Immediate Failures=

  • {{tq|It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria}} - {{done}} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 15:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
  • {{tq|It contains copyright infringements}} - [https://tools.wmflabs.org/copyvios/?lang=en&project=wikipedia&oldid=&action=search&use_engine=1&use_links=1&turnitin=1&title=2003_Budweiser_Shootout there's one on Copyvio detector], but I don't think so. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 15:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
  • {{tq|It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include{{cleanup}}, {{POV}}, {{unreferenced}} or large numbers of {{citation needed}}, {{clarify}}, or similar tags. (See also {{QF-tags}}).}} - {{done}} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 15:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
  • {{tq|It is not stable due to edit warring on the page.}} - {{done}} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 15:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)

=Links=

  • [https://dispenser.info.tm/~dispenser/cgi-bin/webchecklinks.py?page=2003_Budweiser_Shootout#view:0.1.1.1.1.1 checklinks is happy] Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 15:50, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
  • No [https://dispenser.info.tm/~dispenser/cgi-bin/dablinks.py?page=2003_Budweiser_Shootout dablinks]/ Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 15:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)

=Prose=

==Lede==

  • Geoff Bodine won the pole position through a lot, - what does this mean? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 15:55, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
  • This is a formal name to say that Bodine won the poie position via a draw. MWright96 (talk) 18:42, 16 July 2019 (UTC)
  • rest is fine Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 15:55, 12 July 2019 (UTC)

==Background==

  • The image isn't of the track, it should be listed in the caption that it's a artists version Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:00, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Corrected. MWright96 (talk) 18:42, 16 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Captions on images should be full sentences Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:00, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Corrected. MWright96 (talk) 18:42, 16 July 2019 (UTC)
  • one of six superspeedways to hold NASCAR races; the others are - not sure on the word "are", suggests these races are on-going. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:00, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Yes, that is still the case. MWright96 (talk) 18:42, 16 July 2019 (UTC)
  • wikilink/explain "banked". Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:00, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Wikilinked banked to Banked turn. MWright96 (talk) 18:42, 16 July 2019 (UTC)

==Practice and qualification==

  • Sorry for the delay on this one - Had my hands full with an FA. back now:
  • For qualifying, the nineteen drivers that appeared to race chose - I prefer "nineteen participants", less confusing. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 08:01, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • {{done}} MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • pole position and Kurt Busch are both linked twice. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 08:01, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Rectified. MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • The qualifying is quite long just to say where the top ten finished. I'd stick with a top 5, considering it was a lot. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 08:01, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Not too sure about this query since there are less than 20 participants in the race. MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)

==Race==

  • Eastern Standard Time (UTC−05:00) - Don't need to say both of these things. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 08:01, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • MOS:TIMEZONE states that this is an acceptable method of writing. MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • was televised live - broadcast live
  • {{done}} MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • commanded the drivers to start their engines - "commanded" is quite a strong word. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 08:01, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • I think that is acceptable and it is tradition to start the race via this method in NASCAR racing. MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • On lap three, Geoff Bodine felt one of his tires rubbing on his car's bodywork, and he drove his car into the garage.[2] It was discovered that his suspension was damaged and he was confirmed as the race's only retirement on the fourth lap. - lap three or four? Did he notice it on 3 and pit on lap 4? Or, did he go back out and come back in? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 08:01, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Clarified. MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • The whole thing about the 10-minute pit stop needs explaining to me. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 08:01, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Clarified. MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Newman clung onto Earnhardt's rear bumper panel - not literally, surely? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 08:01, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Yes, this is a technique called bump drafting as to maintain momentum. MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • attempted to go two abreast behind him - did they go two abreast? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 08:12, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Corrected. MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)

==Post-race comments==

  • Could this be changed to something like "press comments?" Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 08:12, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Changed it to "After the race". MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • The Semi-colon in the first sentence isn't right, neither part is required for the other. I'd just change to "The win earned Earnhardt $205,000 and celebrated by performing donuts in the infield grass in front of a crowd of 75,000 people."Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 08:12, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • {{done}} MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Rest is good. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 08:12, 29 July 2019 (UTC)

=Notes & References=

=GA Review=

:GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

  1. It is reasonably well written.
  2. :a (prose, spelling, and grammar): {{GAList/check|y}} b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): {{GAList/check|y}}
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  4. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
  5. :a (reference section): {{GAList/check|y}} b (citations to reliable sources): {{GAList/check|y}} c (OR): {{GAList/check|y}} d (copyvio and plagiarism): {{GAList/check|y}}
  6. ::
  7. It is broad in its coverage.
  8. :a (major aspects): {{GAList/check|y}} b (focused): {{GAList/check|y}}
  9. ::
  10. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
  11. :Fair representation without bias: {{GAList/check|y}}
  12. ::
  13. It is stable.
  14. :No edit wars, etc.: {{GAList/check|y}}
  15. ::
  16. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
  17. :a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): {{GAList/check|y}} b (appropriate use with suitable captions): {{GAList/check|y}}
  18. ::
  19. Overall:
  20. :Pass/Fail: {{GAList/check|y}}
  21. ::

=Comments=

  • Automated note - If you fancy returning the favour, I have outstanding GA nominations that require reviewing at WP:GAN. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these, however it's definately not manditory. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 07:17, 11 June 2019 (UTC)
  • Hi {{u|MWright96}}, pretty close here, just a few comments above. Sorry for the delay. I'd also mention that the table isn't effected by WP:DUPLINK, so you can link every instance of a team/driver being mentioned. I won't place this on hold, as it's pretty close. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 08:14, 29 July 2019 (UTC)
  • {{reply|Lee Vilenski}} Many thanks for reviewing another article of mine that I have significantly expanded. All of the queries raised above and have said where I have not and provided a reason for why. MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)