Talk:2009 World Cup of Pool/GA1

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 08:12, 22 April 2020 (UTC)

Shall be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 08:12, 22 April 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.
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3. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
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6. It is broad in its coverage.
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9. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
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12. It is stable.
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15. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
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• The tournament name should be mentioned in the name= field of the infobox
• Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:33, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

• "was a professional pool tournament played in the discipline of nine-ball. The event was the fourth World Cup of Pool, a scotch doubles knockout championship representing 32 national teams." - how about merging these two sentences together and making them more concise?
• It's actually already quite a long sentence. My only suggestion would be to change it to:
• The 2009 World Cup of Pool (also known as the 2009 PartyPoker World Cup of Pool due to sponsorship) was a professional nine-ball pool, and the fourth World Cup of Pool, a scotch doubles knockout championship representing 32 national teams.
• I'd say that it's an improvement MWright96 (talk) 15:14, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
• But, I find that to be quite long. I do prefer to state we are talking about pool, and then that it's nine-ball, as they aren't the same thing. Let me know your thoughts Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:37, 27 April 2020 (UTC).
• "The Korean team of Ga Young Kim and Yun Mi Lim were the first all-female team" - repetition of the word "team"
• Changed to pair. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:37, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
• Delink the dollar sign
• Yeah, I didn't know this was a thing. I get confused as to why we do this, considering the symbol is used for many different currencies, yet the £ which we should link isn't used for very much. Unlinked. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:37, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
• "The USA team were defeated in the quarter-finals by the Chinese pair Fu Jian-bo and Li He-wen 5–9." - {{xt|Chinese pair of}}
• Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:37, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
• "The event was won by the Filipino team of Francisco Bustamante and Efren Reyes, who defeated the German team" - repetition of the word "team"
• reworded. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:37, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

• "The 2009 World Cup of Pool was a pairs nine-ball tournament played at the the Annex of SM City North EDSA in Quezon City," - stray "the" is unneeded
• Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:06, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
• "in the final of the previous year's event." - how about {{xt|2008 event.}}
• Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:06, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
• "The tournament was broadcast as 31 one-hour episodes also produced by Matchroom.[8] Locally, the event was broadcast live on Solar Sports and CS9.[9]" - how about {{xt|The tournament was broadcast live locally on Solar Sports and CS9, and 31 one-hour episode were produced by Matchroom Sport.[8][9]}}
• Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:06, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

• "This was similar to that of the previous year's event." - the text in bold is overlinked
• Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:06, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Money earned was shared between the players." - {{xt|Money earned by the team was shared between their players.}}
• Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:06, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

• "with 31 countries participating, two teams representing the host nation Philippines." - {{xt|and two teams}}
• Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:07, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
• "An all female team," - {{xt|all-female}}
• Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:07, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

• "The opening match of the tournament featured" - {{xt|saw}}
• {{done}} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
• "featured the French team of Stephan Cohen and Vincent Facquet win 8–1 over the Canadian team." - {{xt|French pair of Stephan Cohen and Vincent Facquet take a 8–1 victory over the Canadian team.}}
• {{done}} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
• "allowed USA to win 8–7." - {{xt|allowed the USA}}
• {{done}} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
• "The defending champion USA team of Rodney Morris and Shane Van Boening met the Maltese team of Alex Borg and Tony Drago in the opening match." - more repetition of the word "team"
• {{done}} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
• "The unseeded Indonesian team won their opening round match over the Indian team" - repetition of the word "team"
• {{done}} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
• "An all-female team competed for the first time at the event, with the Korean team of Ga Young Kim and Yun Mi Lim." - repetition of the word "team"
• {{done}} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
• "The pair lead 3–0 before being defeated 5–8" - {{xt|led}}
• {{done}} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
• "who won six racks in-a-row.[19][15]" - refs in numerical order please
• {{done}} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Japan were trailing at 3–6 behind in their match against Croatia," - remove the word in bold
• {{done}} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
• "The team defeated the Hong Kong team" - more close repetition of the word "team"
• {{done}} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
• "The finish team won 8–3 over" - typo; should be {{xt|Finnish}}
• {{done}} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
• Also, for the above sentence, it would be benefical to mention the Finnish players by name
• {{done}} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Kenny Kwok and Lee Chenman in a whitewash 8–0." - the words in bold should be the other way round
• {{done}} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
• "when referee Cielo Lopez deemed Bruno Muratore's arm had struck the cue ball." - how about expand that it was Muratore's left arm that was deemed to have struck the cue ball
• {{done}} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
• "The Philippine A side of Orcollo and Alcano won eight straight racks after trailing 0–3 to the Russian side to win 8–3." - repetition of the word "side"
• {{done}} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
• "but missed some "crucial shots" during the match." - according to whom?
• Hmm, the only info I have is that Matchroom Sport published the report. I'll see if I can dig up an author of the original piece Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)

• "The quarter-finals were all played on 5 September and as a race-to-nine racks." - the word in bold is unneeded
• Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:12, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
• "defeating the Netherlands team Niels Feijen and Nick van den Berg 9–7." - {{xt|duo of}}
• Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:12, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
• "the Chinese and Filipino teams were at hill-hill 8—8." - the em dash should be replaced by an en dash (–) per MOS:DASH
• My AWB sweep beat me to this one. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:12, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
• "The Philipino team won the next rack to win the tournament winning 11–9." - {{xt|win the match 11–9 and the tournament.}}
• done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:12, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

• The image of Reyes should be made upright per MOS:UPRIGHT
• Made 0.6 - I'm never sure on correct sizes for these. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:58, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

• Those references that are missing the dates of publication should be included
• The archive link for Reference 2 needs fixing
• Ive just removed it. Wayback machine and webmedic are not accessible for my browser currently, so I'll have to look into that later. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:55, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
• References 7 and 10 are the same
• Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:55, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
• Reference 19's publisher should be the work instead
• Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:55, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
• References 31, 32, 35 and 36 are missing their respective works
• Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:55, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Am going to put the article on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 09:53, 22 April 2020 (UTC)

• {{reply|Lee Vilenski}} Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 10:58, 1 May 2020 (UTC)