Talk:2023 Serbian parliamentary election/GA1

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Nominator: {{User|Vacant0}} 14:22, 14 March 2025 (UTC)

Reviewer: ZKang123 (talk · contribs) 01:38, 2 May 2025 (UTC)

Will check this out.--ZKang123 (talk · contribs) 01:38, 2 May 2025 (UTC)

:Thanks for picking this up. I'll work on this tomorrow. Vacant0 (talk • contribs) 18:29, 12 May 2025 (UTC)

• {{!xt| Aleksandar Vučić, who initially served as deputy prime minister and later as prime minister,}} I require a citation to support the fact he was previously DPM and PM, given the two citations don't see to support it
• {{!xt|Ana Brnabić, who has been the prime minister of Serbia since 2017, and her third cabinet were sworn in on 26 October 2022}} – This sentence reads awkwardly
• Ref 16 checks out
• {{!xt|which went successful}} – would say {{tq|which was successful}}
• {{!xt|Beginning in July 2022, tensions between Serbia and Kosovo heightened, firstly due to the expiration of the eleven-year validity period for car documents.}} – Rewrite to {{tq|Tensions between Serbia and Kosovo escalated in July 2022, initially due to the expiry of an eleven-year validity period for car documentation.}}
• {{!xt|After negotiations with the diplomatic representatives of the European Union in August, an agreement on car documents was reached.}} It felt a bit obvious that through negotations that an agreement would be reached. Might rewrite {{tq|This was resolved in August following negotiations with the diplomatic representatives of the European Union.}}
• Also abbreviate the EU in the first instance and then just use EU from here on out.
• {{!xt|Shortly before the deadline for the car documents expired, Albin Kurti, the prime minister of Kosovo, announced that a phased implementation would instead be implemented up to 21 April 2023.}} – {{tq|Just before the car document expiry deadline, Kosovo prime minister Albin Kurti announced a phased implementation lasting until 21 April 2023.}}
• {{!xt|In protest to the announcement,}} – {{tq|In protest of...}}
• {{!xt|Another agreement regarding documents was reached in November 2022, after negotiations with the European Union}} – Swap these clauses.
• {{!xt|it was announced that licence plates issued by Serbia would continue to be in use in North Kosovo}} – is there a deadline for these plates?
• {{!xt|The government of Kosovo denied the claim that ROSU}} – remove "the claim"
• {{!xt|admitted being involved in the attack;}} – {{tq|admitted his involvement in the attack}}
• {{!xt|he was later arrested by the government of Serbia, but the Supreme Court denied the motion to place Radoičić in custody for 30 days and he was ultimately released}} – {{tq|he was later arrested by the Serbian government, but the Supreme Court rejected the request to detain Radoičić for 30 days and he was released.}}
• {{!xt|In May 2023, the Belgrade school shooting and a mass murder near Mladenovac and Smederevo occurred}} – This sentence reads a bit awkwardly here
• {{!xt|In response to the shootings, and a day before the protests began, Ružić announced his resignation}} – {{tq|In response to the shootings, Ružić announced his resignation a day before the protests began.}}
• {{!xt|As one of the demands of the protests, organisers initiated a motion in the National Assembly to dismiss minister Bratislav Gašić in early July 2023,}} – {{tq|As part of the protest demands, organisers filed a motion in the National Assembly in early July 2023 to dismiss Minister Bratislav Gašić. However...}}

More to come.--ZKang123 (talk · contribs) 13:18, 8 May 2025 (UTC)

• {{!xt|Bursać and Jovana Đurbabić from non-governmental and monitoring organisation CRTA}} – I suggest explaining what CRTA stands for.
• Also {{!xt|non-governmental organisation}} could be simply abbreviated as NGO afterwards
• {{!xt|The European Union criticised Kosovo's rejection of holding the Serbian parliamentary election on its territory.}} – {{tq|The European Union criticised Kosovo for refusing to allow the Serbian parliamentary election to be held on its territory.}}
• I might require citations for the ideology and political position for the 2022 results table, because the statistics don't show them.

• {{!xt|Political commentators pointed out that SPS was divided on the issue of joining NPZD and that as a result, the formalisation of NPZD was delayed}} – {{tq|Political commentators [on N1] pointed out that the delay may stem from internal divisions within the SPS over whether to join the NPZD.}} I might specify N1 for attribution
• {{!xt| Dragomir Anđelković argued that NPZD could be only as a slogan for the upcoming elections.}} – I need further clarity what do you mean by "only as a slogan"?
• {{!xt|Vučić, however, announced in late October 2023 that NPZD would be formed in the coming period.}} – I might put "in the coming period" in quotes
• {{!xt|and that SPS would again take part in the election JS and Greens of Serbia (Zeleni)}} – {{tq|...take part in the election with JS and...}}
• {{!xt|He formed the Serbia Centre (SRCE) organisation in June 2022 and in July 2023 it was registered as a political party.}} – {{tq|In June that year, he formed the Serbia Centre (SRCE) organisation, which was then registered as a political party in July 2023.}}
• {{!xt|Within Narodna, a dispute between its president Vuk Jeremić and vice-president Miroslav Aleksić began in June 2023}} Any reason for the dispute?

• {{!xt|with 2,818 candidates listed in total}} – "in total" is redundant.
• {{!xt|due to not having enough valid signatures}} – {{tq|due to insufficient valid signatures}}
• Similarly for the list of political parties, please add citations for the parties' ideologies and position.
• I think back under electoral system you could also explain a little about minority lists.

• {{!xt|CRTA reported in its analysis that "inequality, suspicions, and threats" (neravnopravnost, sumnje i pretnje) were seen}} – {{tq|CRTA reported "inequality, suspicions, and threats" (neravnopravnost, sumnje i pretnje) in its analysis.}}
• {{!xt|Amidst the campaign, the Centre for Investigative Journalism of Serbia (CINS) also released a report in which it was revealed that during the campaign period a youth organisation operating a call centre was tasked with intimidating voters}} – {{tq|During the campaign, the Centre for Investigative Journalism of Serbia (CINS) revealed that a youth group ran a call centre to intimidate voters.}}

More to come.--ZKang123 (talk · contribs) 07:27, 17 May 2025 (UTC)

• As per [https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=2023_Serbian_parliamentary_election&oldid=1290794509 this version]
• Ref 96, 99, 102, 105, 109, 124, 137, 139, 157, 168, 177, 195, 196, 216, 218, 277 check out