Talk:26 Broadway/GA1

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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 09:37, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use {{Done}}, {{Fixed}}, {{Added}}, {{Not Done}}, {{Doing}}, or {{Removed}}, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. —♠Vami_IV†♠ 09:37, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

:{{re|Vami IV}} Thanks for the review. I have addressed all your comments above. epicgenius (talk) 15:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

• {{tq|that is inspired}} was inspired.
• {{done}}
• {{tq|as well as above the 18th and 22nd}} Shorten "as well as" to "and".
• {{done}}
• {{Tq|it consists of a recessed double-height arch, with elaborately carved spandrels at the top of the arch.}} Consider "at its top".
• {{done}}
• {{tq|these doorways are located within doorways topped by pediments and clocks.}} Replace the first "doorways" with something else.
• {{done}} That was an error. epicgenius (talk) 15:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Features": Atlas Obscura, which uses user-generated material, is not a reliable source.
• I thought so. This is a direct quote, but {{removed}} anyway. epicgenius (talk) 15:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
• Move the image in "Initial structure" to the right.
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• {{Tq|"Twenty-six Broadway was once to oil what 1600 Pennsylvania Avenue [the White House] is to politics."}} Just use the White Houses's address to link the White House here.
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• {{tq|every cent any of [Standard Oil's subsidiaries] made found its way to 26 Broadway"}} reads weird
• {{Fixed}} myself after finishing the review, after after I had a staircase wit moment and remembered this, by removing "any" –♠Vami_IV†♠ 11:31, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• {{Tq|After World War I, Walter C. Teagle}} Who?
• {{done}}
• {{Tq|(died 1928)}} Delete.
• {{done}} I thought it was relevant to the narrative, but apparently not. epicgenius (talk)
• Would be if his death effected the lease. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 16:07, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
• :{{u|Vami IV}}, it did not. epicgenius (talk) 16:41, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
• The content of "Tenats#Former" should be carefully inserted into "History".
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• {{tq|A third, the Urban Assembly School of Business for Young Women, is a high school serving grades 9-12.}} When did this open?
• {{done}} 2005.
• {{tq|Starting in 2008, the PS 234 elementary school was supposed to have used [...] subsequently deemed "not appropriate for kindergartners"}} This would make this school not a current tenant. Shorten and send this sentence and its citation into "History"
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• {{Tq|[67]:540}} This is the only instance of this form of citation in the article. The [67] part also already has the page number(s).
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