Talk:BAE Systems Nimrod MRA4/GA1
GA Review
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Reviewer: HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 01:43, 1 March 2011 (UTC)
- The lead seems quite short relative to the size of the article.
- The body needs a copy edit.
- Too many short sentences, making the prose choppy
- Too many short paragraphs, with the same effect, making it look untidy
- Lack of variety in sentence structure{{mdash}}far too many sentences starting with "in [month]" or "on [date]"
For the prose alone, this is not GA standard and I don't think there is much more I can do as a reviewer until the article has been tidied up. You might find other editors willing to help at WP:PRV#General copyediting and/or WP:GOCE. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 02:55, 1 March 2011 (UTC)
:It's starting to look much better now. Some of the paragraphs could still do with being merged together and it might benefit from another section header, but the latter is just a suggestion. Keep up the good work and don't hesitate to ping me if or when you need my attention. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 19:38, 2 March 2011 (UTC)
::Upon further review of the work that has gone into this, I'm going to pass it. Congratulations. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 05:21, 4 March 2011 (UTC)