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Talk:Bikini/GA1

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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger (talk · contribs) 08:51, 16 December 2013 (UTC)

  • This article was created on Novemeber 1, 2001. That is before Abraham Lincoln (Nov 4), France (Nov 4) and California (Nov 17) were created on wikipedia. One day after Japan. Wow!!! What a treasure. I may have never reviewed an article this old before.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:08, 16 December 2013 (UTC)
  • How many articles existed on WP on Novemeber 1, 2001?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:14, 16 December 2013 (UTC)
  • The [http://stats.wikimedia.org/EN/TablesWikipediaEN.htm records] indicate that in November 2001 there were about 14K articles on English WP. Not sure if that is month end or not. FWIW, October had 12K. There are now about 4.5 million English WP articles.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:21, 16 December 2013 (UTC)
  • The toolbox to the right shows that there are numerous external links that are no longer of service. You will need to refresh your references.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:14, 16 December 2013 (UTC)

;WP:LEAD

;The modern bikini

;Social resistance

;Rise to popularity

;Mass acceptance

  • It is odd to have a see also template at the bottom of a section. Move it to a section at the bottom of the article above the references.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:10, 16 December 2013 (UTC)

;Bikini variants

  • "The amount of coverage can vary widely, from a string bikini with very little coverage to a full design with maximum coverage" is an odd sentence because there are two designs with less coverage and it does not name a design with more coverage. Do the sources support something like "The amount of coverage can vary widely, from a pubikini, microkini or string bikini with very little coverage to a fuller designs with more coverage such as the tankini, skirtini or bandeaukini"?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:45, 17 December 2013 (UTC)
  • These three short paragraphs need not be redundant with examples.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:45, 17 December 2013 (UTC)
  • Is it possible to better integrate the table and the prose. I.e., there are a lot of things in the prose not in the table. Can we find content and pictures to improve the table?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:45, 17 December 2013 (UTC)
  • It seems like some prose should discuss how the trikini and tankini are both considered part of the family even though the navel is exposed, IMO.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:45, 17 December 2013 (UTC)

;Variants

;Beach volleyball

  • Either link women's Olympic beach volleyball or just the last two words.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:51, 17 December 2013 (UTC)
  • "Dancers, sex appeal and bikinis worn by women players as much as athletic ability made beach volleyball..." is either ungrammatical or not explaining something.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:51, 17 December 2013 (UTC)

;Bodybuilding

;Age appropriateness

;Health issues

;See also

;Hmm

;Images

  • This article has a long list of minor fixes for the most part. It will take a lot of work to clean up. I'll review the progress in a week. I am putting it on hold now.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:46, 17 December 2013 (UTC)

Hello TonyTheTiger briefly - but firstly thank you for reviewing the bikini article. I have been unable to respond to you personally or the article review since last week momentous events occurred effecting our family (but thankfully positive ones!!). I have not even been able to visit Wikipedia but for once, briefly, in the past nine days... I understand the article needs specific improvements but what is the best course of action from this moment forwards? Is it such that the final pass/fail can be delayed for some more days while I try to personally set aside time to edit, or would I want to formally " withdraw" the nomination (so it doesn't automatically fail b/c the changes aren't made timely)? Of course the intent is to make the necessary edits, it's just like I said there was momentous personal events last week that turned this world upside down so I have not been able to follow-up with you before now. Please advise on the best course of action and thank you for your time Azx2 05:17, 24 December 2013 (UTC)

ps. I left you the same message on your talking page so is to you where best to reply. Thx!!! Azx2 05:17, 24 December 2013 (UTC)

:Take your time. RL will happen. I can wait a week or two. Please respond at your earliest convenience.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:26, 24 December 2013 (UTC)

::If RL has taken over your time for now maybe I should close this review. Let me know if you object.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 15:35, 5 January 2014 (UTC)

=Comments from other users=

  • The lead is so long that I have tagged it already. I will try to help with this GA as much as possible, however. Epicgenius (talk) 16:37, 16 December 2013 (UTC)

:Thank you for your feedback on this. Azx2 05:17, 24 December 2013 (UTC)

  • I just want to point out that I added a {{citation needed}} tag to the following sentence: "The bikini gradually grew to gain wide acceptance in Western society, though it is still unacceptable in most Muslim countries. Some Muslim countries permit the wearing of a bikini; however, it is usually heavily frowned upon. Other Muslim countries entirely prohibit the wearing of a bikini." -Newyorkadam (talk) 22:43, 11 January 2014 (UTC)Newyorkadam