Talk:Brad Davison/GA1

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:12, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

Going to review this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 13:12, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

:Thank you. I will try to review one of your nominations. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.
2. :a (prose): {{GAList/check|y}} b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): {{GAList/check|y}}
3. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
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6. It is broad in its coverage.
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9. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
10. :Fair representation without bias: {{GAList/check|y}}
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12. It is stable.
13. :No edit wars, etc.: {{GAList/check|y}}
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15. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
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19. :Pass/Fail: {{GAList/check|y}}
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• Wikilink football to American football and quarterback to its own article
• Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• "He played quarterback on the football field" - the text in bold can be changed to say {{xt|He played as a quarterback}} or {{xt|He played in the quarterback position}}
• Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• Wikilink the first mention of the term yards to Yards (gridiron football
• Linked to yard. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• Wikilink touchdown to those unfamiliar with American football
• OK. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• "in leading Maple Grove to a 25–5 record and state tournament berth." - {{xt|and a state}}
• Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Davison earned a spot on USA Today's Minnesota All-State Team after averaged 24.4 points," - the text highlighted in bold can be changed to say {{Xt|averaging}}
• OK. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• Wikilink the terms points, rebounds, assists and steals to their respective articles to help those not familiar with basketball
• Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• USA Today should be wikilinked on its first mention
• Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• "He was ranked No. 119 recruit in his class by Rivals.com" - {{Xt|ranked the No. 119}}
• Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• Also, No. could do with the {{abbr}} template added to it to explain that it means number
• I don't know how to do this. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• It is done like this: {{abbr|No.|Number}} MWright96 (talk) 16:22, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• OK. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:29, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• "and committed to Wisconsin on July 11, 2016, " - {{xt|and committed to playing college basketball for Wisconsin}}
• Rephrased. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 15:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

• Wikilink free throw line to Free throw]
• Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:04, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• "and making a team-high 60 times from 3-point range." - {{xt|from the three-point range}}
• Rephrased. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:04, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• Three point range would benefit from being linked to the article Three-point field goal
• OK. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:04, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• "resulting in successful offseason shoulder surgery." - you can say it was the left shoulder that underwent surgery per Wisconsin State Journal source that cites the sentence this portion of text is in
• OK. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:04, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• "and finished with a 15-18 record, " - the hyphen should be replaced by an en dash per MOS:DASH
• Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:04, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• "which ranked them 9th in the Big Ten." - I feel like there are some words that are missing from the end of this sentence
• Rephrased. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:04, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Davison also received attention for perceived flopping, and the NCAA rule to combat flopping was informally called "the Brad Davison rule."" - repetition of the term "flopping"
• Changed to "the NCAA rule to combat it". ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:04, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Davison shot 3-of-20" - en dashes in place of hyphens please
• Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:04, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Davison was suspended one game by the Big Ten for a flagrant foul he committed the previous game " - try not to use neutral wording to replace the word highlighted in bold
• I don't see what the problem is, that is what the foul is called. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:04, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

• "who both of played" - can be either worded to say {{xt|who both played}} or {{xt|both of whom played}}
• Good catch. Changed to "both of whom". ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:07, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• Wikilink National Football Foundation, National Honor Society and Fellowship of Christian Athletes
• Done. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:07, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Davison has participated in over 120 hours of volunteer work," - {{xt|more than}}
• Rephrased. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:07, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/respond to the queries raised above. MWright96 (talk) 15:03, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

• I have addressed your concerns. Thanks for the review. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs)}~ 16:07, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
• {{reply|Editorofthewiki}} Nice work. Am promoting to GA class. I've made one edit to replace some hyphens with en dashes. MWright96 (talk) 16:36, 6 April 2020 (UTC)