Talk:Ciutat Morta/GA1

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 20:20, 18 March 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 20:20, 18 March 2021 (UTC)

:: Thanks for the review so far, the article is improved for it. I've answered everything with some queries, see what you think. Mujinga (talk) 11:51, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

:::: re "expanding #Production to meet the third criteria" I added some lines yesterday and I've added some more today from the last review I found. I've also put in the academic analysis that was previously in further reading. I don't think this film will ever have a production section the size of say Blade Runner 2049, I'm happy the main aspects are covered. Back to you, thanks! Mujinga (talk) 11:38, 21 March 2021 (UTC)

• Improve the non-free use rationale for the poster with this template.

:* {{done}} Mujinga (talk) 10:02, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• "Poster" {{right arrow}} "Promotional release poster"

:* {{done}} Mujinga (talk) 10:02, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• Don't use "
  " in the infobox. Use "plainlist" instead.

:* is this a MOS issue? Mujinga (talk) 10:02, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

::: Well, it says on the film infobox template that plainlist is preferred, and it also helps mobile readers.

:::: Those are good reasons, thanks. {{done}} Mujinga (talk) 11:17, 21 March 2021 (UTC)

• In the lead, remove the comma after "until 2015".

:* I've read it a few times, I prefer it with the comma. Could rephrase if it's a big issue. Might be a British English / US English thing? Mujinga (talk) 10:02, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

::: The issue was that the sentence is kinda short, so a comma wasn't necessary.

• This section is over 400 words, so that passes WP:FILMPLOT.
• Remove the comma after "hit on the head".

:* agreed on that one Mujinga (talk) 10:08, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• Add a comma after the first naming of Rodrigo Lanza.

:* in the brackets? I'd rather not add one there Mujinga (talk) 10:08, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

::: I see your point; it was an Oxford comma thing.

• Remove the comma after "Alfredo Pestana".

:* that one seems good to keep since the commas are bracketing the names Mujinga (talk) 10:08, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• Add a comma after "they looked".

:* i didn't add the comma but i did rephrase since the sentence was clunky Mujinga (talk) 10:08, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• "son of diplomat" {{right arrow}} "son of a diplomat"

:* {{done}} Mujinga (talk) 10:08, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• Add a comma after "gentrification".

:* don't see the need for it, we must have different comma styles Mujinga (talk) 10:10, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

::: Yeah, it was another Oxford comma thing.

• Other than that, this section looks good.

• "seven-storey" {{right arrow}} "seven-story"

:* "storey" is BrEng Mujinga (talk) 10:12, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• Add a comma after "Guàrdia Urbana".

:* again, not seeing the need for it Mujinga (talk) 10:12, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• "decide" {{right arrow}} "decided"

:* {{done}} good spot! Mujinga (talk) 10:12, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• This section is extremely short, so try expanding it.

:* I'll have a look to see if there are any more sources since November when I wrote it. Mujinga (talk) 10:12, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

::* I've added a few more lines Mujinga (talk) 11:35, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

::* added in the academic analysis from further reading Mujinga (talk) 11:35, 21 March 2021 (UTC)

• Add a comma after "June 8, 2013".

:* agreed! Mujinga (talk) 10:17, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• "action" {{right arrow}} "act"

:* yeah that makes sense Mujinga (talk) 10:17, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• "department" {{right arrow}} "Department"

:* rephrased tighter to source Mujinga (talk) 10:17, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• The word "onesidedness" doesn't sound right, so maybe reword it?

:* went back to the source, rephrased Mujinga (talk) 10:24, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• Add more reviews (if possible).

:* I'll have another check although this is all I could find before Mujinga (talk) 10:24, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

:* added two more reviews Mujinga (talk) 11:49, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• Remove the comma after "Guàrdia Urbana".

:* i rather keep it, since it provides a space for breath. Mujinga (talk) 10:27, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

• Add a comma after "Cs, PP".

:* i rather not add one Mujinga (talk) 10:27, 20 March 2021 (UTC)