Talk:Copper Fire/GA1
GA Review
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Nominator: {{User|Penitentes}} 16:55, 30 August 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 00:54, 1 October 2024 (UTC)
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Looking very good. Some copy tweaks to make first. Ping when done. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 01:09, 1 October 2024 (UTC)
:@Sammi Brie Thank you very much for the thorough review! Made the changes. — Penitentes (talk) 13:20, 1 October 2024 (UTC)
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=Copy changes=
- Link Angeles National Forest in the lead
- Hyphenate "fifth-largest"
- {{!xt|At 5:00 p.m., the head of the fire crested the hills above Green Valley, and an hour later a second flank of the fire entered the canyon as firefighters fought to protect the structures there, and were partially successful: by the end of the day, the fire had burned more than 15,600 acres (6,300 ha) and had added five homes to its toll.}} Sentence is quite long. Try {{!xt|At 5:00 p.m., the head of the fire crested the hills above Green Valley, and an hour later a second flank of the fire entered the canyon as firefighters fought to protect the structures there. They were partially successful: by the end of the day, the fire had burned more than 15,600 acres (6,300 ha) and had added five homes to its toll.}}
- {{!xt|it was "going to be another couple days before we get a handle on this."}} MOS:LOGICAL sentence fragment, quote inside period.
- {{!xt|CB&I was found to be 65 percent liable, and Merco found to be 35 percent liable.}} Remove comma WP:CINS
:* {{done}} Copy changes [https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Copper_Fire&diff=prev&oldid=1248783784 made]; good spots all. — Penitentes (talk) 13:16, 1 October 2024 (UTC)
=Sourcing and spot checks=
- 1: The Signal article checks out for inaccessible definition of terrain, Green Valley, 5,600 acre number, cresting, and firefighter counts. {{tick}}
- 6: {{tq|one of the earliest fire seasons in decades}} {{tick}}
- 10: Near-shutdown of the second line; reduced containment; 2,000 in Green Valley and Warm Springs to evacuate. {{tick}}
- 16: Final county road damage toll; June 7 local emergency. {{tick}}
- 17: Environmental damage assessments. {{tick}}
No other sourcing concerns. Earwig mostly turns up banal phrases and organization names.
=Images=
There are two images, both in the infobox. The map is the user's creation and appropriately licensed. (It's truly impressive, by the way.) The other is PD-NASA. Alt text is provided.
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