Talk:Deni Avdija/GA1

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 08:43, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

Will be taking on his review as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 08:43, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.
2. :a (prose): {{GAList/check|y}} b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): {{GAList/check|y}}
3. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
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6. It is broad in its coverage.
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9. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
10. :Fair representation without bias: {{GAList/check|y}}
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12. It is stable.
13. :No edit wars, etc.: {{GAList/check|y}}
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15. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
16. :a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): {{GAList/check|y}} b (appropriate use with suitable captions): {{GAList/check|y}}
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• Delink Israel per MOS:OVERLINK
• "he plays the small forward and power forward positions." - {{xt|plays in the}}
• "he joined Maccabi Tel Aviv in 2013, where he shone as a youth player." - more formal; {{xt|excelled}}

• "Avdija played football until he entered fourth grade," - how about changing it to {{xt|association football}} for ambgiutiy?
• "Avdija initially competed at the youth level for Bnei Herzliya. In 2013, he joined the youth ranks of Maccabi Tel Aviv." - you could merge these two sentences and rewrite them accordingly
• "at Adidas Next Generation Tournament (ANGT) Munich." - {{xt|at the Adidas Next Generation Tournament (ANGT) in Munich.}}

• "he made his professional debut in the Israeli League," - {{xt|Israeli Premier League}}
• "Avdija recorded a then career-high 22 points," - {{xt|career-high of 22}}

• "Avdija led the tournament in rebounds (12.6) and assists (5.3) per game, to go with 15.3 points per game." - {{xt|with 12.6 rebounds, 5.3 assists and 15.3 per game.}}
• "Appearing tired from his previous tournament," - some missing words at the end of this portion of text {{xt|and lacking in endurance}}

• "during 2019 FIBA World Cup qualification." - {{xt|during the 2019 FIBA World Cup qualification stage.}}
• "during EuroBasket 2021 qualification." - {{xt|the EuroBasket 2021 qualifiers.}}

• "and her hometown is kibbutz Beit Zera.[1][33][31][34]" - refs should be in numerical order
• " Sharon Artzi, is Jewish-Israeli, was a track and field athlete and basketball player," - {{xt|a Jewish-Israeli from Kibbutz Beit Zera,}}
• "and her hometown is kibbutz B eit Zera." - this is not need since it will be mentioned in the above point
• "Avdija holds dual citizenship to Israel and Serbia," - {{xt|of}}
• "while his basketball season was suspended" - {{xt|the}}

• The minus sign in the PIR column should be replaced by en dashes (–) per MOS:DASH

• Those references that have hyphens should be replaced by en dashes (–) per MOS:DASH
• References 5, 7 and 9 are missing the author(s) who wrote the respective articles

Am going to put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 12:00, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

{{re|MWright96}} All comments have been addressed. Sportzeditz (talk) 15:25, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

• {{reply|Sportzeditz}} Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 16:36, 23 April 2020 (UTC)