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Talk:Ducks Ahoy!/GA1

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:This review is transcluded from Talk:Ducks Ahoy!/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Nominator: {{User|Guyinblack25}} 04:25, 10 May 2025 (UTC)

Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 12:17, 21 June 2025 (UTC)

Looks nice and short. Will leave comments in an hour or so. ♦ JAGUAR  12:17, 21 June 2025 (UTC)

;Lead

  • "The player maneuvers a boat" - the article's gameplay section describes it as a gondola rather than a generic boat
  • "The title's documentation included a song, jokes, and activities related to the gameplay" - wrong tense; assuming all copies of the game still exist and is not removed from the space-time continuum, it includes those activities
  • The lead is a little on the short side and should be expanded slightly to summarise the article more effectively

;Body

  • "and a town hall, as well as a piazza" - link piazza
  • "...to capsize the player's boat if it gets under gondola" - are these two separate things? Otherwise, {{xt|if it gets underneath it}}. Also, the lead described the hippo as a 'he' - you can use either
  • I see repetition of the game's title in the reception section. Use alternatives such as "the game" or "it" when appropriate to improve prose flow
  • "Ute Elisabeth Van Nuys called Ducks Ahoy! "delightful"" - 'delightful' was not quoted in the previous sentence

This article is generally well written, and certainly comprehensive for a game of its age. I'll leave it on hold until the minor comments are addressed. {{icon|GAH}} ♦ JAGUAR  12:29, 21 June 2025 (UTC)

:Thank you for the feedback. I believe I addressed all but one of your concerns.

:* For Fred D'Ignazio's review, he stated "This game is a delight." and "the game has charm.", so I didn't put those in quotes because I changed the form of those two words. The only word I pulled directly was "humorous", which I can put in quotes.

:Please let me know whether edits are needed for D'Ignazio's wording or if you notice anything else the article. (Guyinblack25 talk 17:13, 21 June 2025 (UTC))

::Thanks for addressing them - the reviewer's wording should be fine. Let's get this promoted. {{icon|GA}} Jaguar (talk) 18:14, 21 June 2025 (UTC)