Talk:Ellen Phillips Samuel Memorial/GA1

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 14:25, 26 January 2024 (UTC)

Hello! My name is GhostRiver, and I'll be conducting this GA review. I will assess the article against the good article criteria. Once I complete my review, you will have seven days to implement the suggested edits.

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• Per [https://www.google.com/books/edition/Fairmount_Park_Art_Association/nmUAAAAAYAAJ an early publication from FPAA], Samuel was specifically born March 8, 1849
• Edited the article to specify the exact date of her birth. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 15:59, 24 February 2024 (UTC)
• {{tq|She died in 1913 and bequeathed much of her estate}} {{right arrow}} {{tq|Upon her death in 1913, she bequeathed much of her estate}}

:{{done}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• Tweak the parameters on the inflation template to change "14,800,000" to "14.8 million"
• Changed inflation template to read "14.8 million" instead of "14,800,000". -JJonahJackalope (talk) 15:59, 24 February 2024 (UTC)

• Women are widows, men are widowers

:{{fixed}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• If you plan to link "will", do so in the first paragraph, not under "Initial plans"

:{{done}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• I'd swap the note so that the main prose says "East River Drive", as that was her actual stipulation, and then make the rename the note
• Swapped East River Drive and Kelly Drive. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 15:59, 24 February 2024 (UTC)
• {{tq|Bunford was criticized by some in the local art community}} {{right arrow}} {{tq|Some in the local art community criticized Bunford}} for active voice

:{{done}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• {{tq|any plans for commissioning more art}} {{right arrow}} {{tq|any plans to commission more art}}

:{{done}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• "though he remained hopeful"

:{{done}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• The second paragraph is the only time after her widower is first introduced that he's referred to as "J. Bunford" and not just "Bunford"

:{{fixed}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• "chosen by art association president"

:{{removed}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• You should add "who" before "created an overall design for the memorial", but that makes the sentence quite long

:{{done}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• East Coast should be capitalized as it refers to a region and not a general concept

:{{done}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• Semicolons after "the settlement of the east coast" and after "and immigration"

:{{done}}

• {{tq|which would run from May}} {{right arrow}} {{tq|which ran from May}}

:{{done}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• Per MOS:OVERLINK, major countries like England, France, and Russia don't need to be linked

:{{done}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• {{tq|of foreign artists}} {{right arrow}} {{tq|by foreign artists}}

:{{done}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• Sentence structure in second para could be clarified - are both the Calder mobiles by the entrance as well, or just the rotating sculpture?
• "Art critics questioned the classification"

:{{removed}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• {{tq|over the value of abstract art}} {{right arrow}} {{tq|on the value of abstract art}}

:{{done}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• Inflation calculator for the values in the last paragraph

• {{tq|where sculptures were for sale}} suggest revising to something like "pieces" to reduce repetition of "sculptures"

:{{done}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• {{tq|A commemorative plaque affixed to the memorial for the memorial reads:}} Holy repetition, Batman!

:{{fixed}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• {{tq|The next year, Jacques Lipchitz bronze work,}} Missing possessive

:{{done}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• Source refers to the Karlsefni statue as being toppled by vandals, not protestors
• Changed wording from "protestors" to "vandals" to maintain consistency with the source. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 15:59, 24 February 2024 (UTC)

• North, South, and Central Terrace are capitalized here but not in History
• For consistency, decapitalized all instances of "north", "south", and "central" in the body of the article. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 15:59, 24 February 2024 (UTC)
• "relief" doesn't need to be linked in both Settling of the Seaboard and The Birth of a Nation

:{{done}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• {{tq|cricized}} typo

:{{done}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• South Terrace is capitalized here but not in the History section

:{{done}} -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

• Good

• No stability concerns, nominator is main editor
• Images are appropriate and are properly licensed
• [https://copyvios.toolforge.org/?lang=en&project=wikipedia&title=Ellen+Phillips+Samuel+Memorial&oldid=&action=search&use_engine=1&use_links=1&turnitin=0 CV report] looks good, almost all proper nouns and direct quotations

Putting on hold. Please ping me when everything has been addressed. — GhostRiver 19:45, 17 February 2024 (UTC)

:@JJonahJackalope Just to let you know, I've went ahead and already addressed some basic stuff in the article and they're marked above. Good luck on getting the article to GA and lmk if anything else is requested of me! -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)

::{{u|GhostRiver}}, just wanted to ping you to let you know that I have reviewed your GA review and made some additional edits to address the points you raised. Additionally, I want to thank {{u|Dcdiehardfan}} for their help. Please let me know if you have any further questions, comments, or concerns regarding the article. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 15:59, 24 February 2024 (UTC)

:::@GhostRiver, are you able to close this review? -- asilvering (talk) 16:59, 21 March 2024 (UTC)

::::{{u|JJonahJackalope}} Apologies for the delay. Bipolar disorder is difficult. Passing now. — GhostRiver 01:51, 7 April 2024 (UTC)

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