Talk:Freemasonry/GA2

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Reviewer: Folklore1 (talk · contribs) 16:40, 7 January 2014 (UTC)

As I perform the review, I will update the following table. Please look below the table for my questions and comments. Folklore1 (talk) 16:40, 7 January 2014 (UTC)

I suggest changing "It states in part:" to "It states:". Use of "in part" to quote a portion of a source is unnecessary and confusing. Folklore1 (talk) 13:45, 8 January 2014 (UTC) {{done}}

The sentence beginning with "However, Pike" is grammatically correct, but awfully long and complex. Breaking it into two sentences would make it easier to read. Folklore1 (talk) 13:53, 8 January 2014 (UTC){{done}}

Use of present tense in the phrase "appears to harbour some reservations" gives the impression that the former archbiship may still have issues with Freemasonry. Should the sentence be revised? Folklore1 (talk) 14:07, 8 January 2014 (UTC){{done}}

I inserted a paragraph break at a point where it looks like one was intended. There was a gap in the text visible only in edit mode, which also seemed a logical break point for reading clarity. Please take a look at the rest of the text; there were two other gaps in the text which could be intended paragraph breaks. Folklore1 (talk) 14:24, 8 January 2014 (UTC) {{done}}

Upper and lower case are applied inconsistently ("Lodge" or "lodge") in this section. Folklore1 (talk) 14:36, 8 January 2014 (UTC) {{done}}

The reference to "Provincial Grand Lodge of East Lancashire" incorrectly displays the publisher name of the source rather than its title, "Materials: Papers and Speakers". This condition can be corrected by recording the title (Materials: Papers and Speakers) inside the brackets with the url, and recording the publisher (Provincial Grand Lodge of East Lancashire) outside the brackets. Alternatively, you could use the Wikipedia citation templates to assure a consistent style in references. Folklore1 (talk) 15:14, 8 January 2014 (UTC) {{done}}

The reference to "Grand lodge of British Columbia and Yukon" should be titled "Brethren, please be upstanding". Folklore1 (talk) 15:16, 8 January 2014 (UTC) {{done}}

"Masonic Dictionary" is the name of the work (website) where the source was published. "Past Master" should be displayed as the source's title. Folklore1 (talk) 15:22, 8 January 2014 (UTC) {{done}}

"GADLU" also displays the name of the work where the title belongs. As the source article has a specific date--something too often omitted from website articles--I recommend including that date in the reference. Dates can be helpful in locating an article in whatever archive it was moved to when a url link goes dead, a frequent concern with website references. Folklore1 (talk) 15:31, 8 January 2014 (UTC) {{done}}

I had to visit the source of "For instance" to learn the actual title of the article. Please use quotation marks to identify the titles of newspaper, magazine, and website articles. The names of the work (magazine name, website name) where an article is published should be italicized. Folklore1 (talk) 15:42, 8 January 2014 (UTC) {{done}}

Several references lack quotation marks for the titles of magazine, newspaper and website articles. Several do not italicize the titles of books, magazines and newspapers. Folklore1 (talk) 16:24, 8 January 2014 (UTC) {{done}}

The reference to "Campbell, Donald G.; Committee on Ritual" has an unmatched set of quotation marks at the end of the text. Folklore1 (talk) 15:54, 8 January 2014 (UTC){{done}}

In what year was "UGLE Book of Constitutions" published? Folklore1 (talk) 15:57, 8 January 2014 (UTC) {{done}}

Please repair the link to "Can a Muslim be a freemason?" Folklore1 (talk) 16:12, 8 January 2014 (UTC) {{done}}

The reference notes have several minor errors involving punctuation, spacing, and inappropriate upper/lower case. I don't think any of this is significant enough to delay an upgrade to GA status, but I recommend correcting these errors in post-review improvements. Folklore1 (talk) 14:44, 9 January 2014 (UTC)