Talk:Gary Schiff/GA1

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| colspan="3" | 1. {{Wikipedia:Good article criteria/GAC|1}}:

{{GATable/item|1a|neu|The prose is good. The one problem is context: it assumes a local audience, where Wikipedia aims to be loosely accessible, at least, to a global audience. I recommend putting "American politician" or something along those lines in the first sentence, before mentioning anything specific to Minnesota. Similarly, in the first body paragraph I suggest you identify the location of Lewiston-Porter High School (Youngstown, NY). There are a few other stylistic quibbles but they're not part of the GA criteria.

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{{GATable/item|1b|nay|The layout is fine, but the lead is insufficient. The lead should be at least a solid paragraph, maybe two, summarizing the most important points of each section. It doesn't have to be long but it should be able to stand on its own and explain what Schiff has done and why he matters, not just list the offices he's held. The lead should answer: who is he? what's his story?

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{{GATable/item|2a|aye|Well cited, although there's a slight link glitch (ref 9) which should be fixed.

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{{GATable/item|2c|nay|There are a number of instances where the source does not match the article. I'm only spot-checking but it happens quite a few times.

"The theater reopened as the Cowles Center for Dance and the Performing Arts in September 2011 and hosted 110 performances in its first season."

:This is an example of what Wikipedia considers original synthesis (WP:SYNTH). The theater's success in 2011 was reported by a reliable source, but the source did not link this back to Schiff's work in 1990. The article should only refer to sources that specifically mention Schiff's efforts, not sources that may reflect long-term consequences of Schiff's work without mentioning him.

"... a measure that permitted sidewalk cafes to use permanent outdoor furniture[19]"

:The source listed only indicates that he introduced this measure, not that it passed. It should say "would permit sidewalk cafes" unless there's a source showing it actually went into law.

"He also sponsored ordinances that reduced the requirements of the Minneapolis Truth of Sale in Housing Program"

:The source only says he voted for this bill.

"... added domestic partnerships to the Zoning Code's definition of "family" in terms of housing.[22]"

:The source listed doesn't appear to associate Schiff with this amendment at all.

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{{GATable/item|3a|nay|The only glaring omission is his upbringing, everything pre-1990. The Buffalo News gives his father's name as Robert J. Schiffhauer ("Reporter's Notebook / Ambassador", April 6, 1989) and Gary's birth name (Gary J. Schiffhauer). The [http://www.startribune.com/local/minneapolis/159508905.html Star-Tribune] confirms his birth name and birth place, and the fact that he's the youngest of six children. Other childhood information would be nice if you could find it, but at least this basic info should be included.

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{{GATable/item|3b|nay|The paragraph about the Vikings stadium, which doesn't mention Schiff at all, is a little long. Maybe it could be worked into the following paragraph which does mention Schiff. The approval of the financing plan (2012) is mentioned in both paragraphs, for example.

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{{GATable/item|4|aye|The information is well cited and doesn't appear overly biased.

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{{GATable/item|5|aye|

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{{GATable/item|6a|aye|

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{{GATable/item|6b|aye|No problems.

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{{GATable/item|7|neu|

This is a good biography of a local politician (a rarity on Wikipedia), and comes close to the GA criteria. I'll be happy to pass it if a few revisions are made. Let me know what you think.

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