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Talk:George Kistiakowsky/GA1

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 10:26, 24 May 2013 (UTC)

I'll get started on this shortly. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 10:26, 24 May 2013 (UTC)

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Comments

  • the article links to several dab pages [http://toolserver.org/~dispenser/cgi-bin/dablinks.py?page=George_Kistiakowsky]
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • alt text needed on some images (not a GA requirement) per [http://toolserver.org/~dispenser/cgi-bin/altviewer.py?page=George_Kistiakowsky]
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • all other toolbox checks are green. (no action required)
  • development of shaped charges
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • Hugh Stott Taylor , needs to lose the space before the comma
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • and gamegave him
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • He became an associate professor twice, might be worth clarifying the second time was at Harvard
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • tapped - suggest a little informal, perhaps "selected" or "recruited"
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • Spring → spring
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • was into RDX
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • "The challenge was to produce an industrial process that could produce it on a large scale", suggest substituting the first "produce" with "develop"
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • andwhich was widely used in torpedoes
  • {{tick}} Ooops. Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • calling outthat demanded forfurther investigation
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • suggest you explain a little more about the Chapman–Jouguet model, perhaps "the Chapman–Jouguet model of detonation velocity"?
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • The first para of the Manhatten Project subsection starts in 1944 then goes back to 1943. Suggest you put it in chronological order to show how he became involved
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • "Kistiakowsky watched the as the" not sure if a word is missing or extra
  • {{tick}} Deleted. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • He sent Kistiakowsky, in early November 1960, to the SAC Headquarters in Omaha to evaluate the SAC war plans → In early November 1960, he sent Kistiakowsky to the SAC Headquarters in Omaha to evaluate the SAC war plans
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • The orders gave SAC officers the choice to cooperate with Kistiakowsky, do you mean they had no choice? Unclear.
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • fn's 13 & 23, pp→p
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • his name is unnecessarily bolded in the Refs (Dainton)
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • physics should probably have an initial capital in the infobox
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • The file File:George Kistiakowsky ID badge.png just needs its PD licence tweaked over at Commons to fix a syntax error
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
  • there are three overlinks, Physical chemistry, Manhattan Project and American Chemical Society
  • {{tick}} Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)

That's it, placing on hold for seven days for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 12:00, 24 May 2013 (UTC)

  • All points addressed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2013 (UTC)

:*Good work, moving to promote. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 01:48, 25 May 2013 (UTC)