Talk:HMS Illustrious (87)/GA1

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 00:09, 12 June 2014 (UTC)

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  • "She was badly damaged underwater by a bomb in April" which year?{{tick}}
  • "her armour plates, which had suffered" the plates themselves, or the manufacturer? Needs clarification.{{tick}}

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  • there are quite a few examples of overlinking, starting with Home Fleet in the lead, island, Ark Royal, Naval mine, Corsair, Sumatra, Indefatigable, bridge, Firefly, tugboat, 814 and 824 Sqns{{tick}}
  • The paragraph starting "On 7 January 1941" is very long, I suggest breaking it up a bit for readability

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  • "She was nicknamed "Lusty" by the men who served in her." is uncited{{tick}}

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  • File:Jetlanding.jpg doesn't appear to have a valid licence.{{tick}}

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Comment: copyedited down to Return to the Indian Ocean. - Dank (push to talk) 01:36, 12 June 2014 (UTC)

Comments by Peacemaker67 (send... over) 10:36, 12 June 2014 (UTC):

  • suggestion only - the range data would be better placed in a small table
  • given the significant variation, perhaps the range of complements should be included in the infobox
  • how many boilers? 8 in the infobox, 6 in the text{{tick}}
  • no alt text on images (not a GAN requirement, suggestion only)

I think that I've dealt with all of these. See if there's anything that I missed. The infobox only covers the ship's data as built. Why do you think that the license for jetlanding.jpg is invalid? The photo is not one that appears to be copied from a book, at least none of the books that I checked on the Attacker, and appears to have been shot by a guy doing his National Service at that time. He seems to have digitized it by simply shooting a photo of the original.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:52, 12 June 2014 (UTC)

Ok, I'm happy with that, makes sense. Listing. Regards, Peacemaker67 (send... over) 07:10, 13 June 2014 (UTC)