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Talk:HMS Mosquito (1910)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 22:36, 26 December 2023 (UTC)

I will review, comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 22:36, 26 December 2023 (UTC)

Lead

  • No issues identified

Design and Development

  • {{xt|This also reduced costs, }}: "also" is used later in this sentence, suggest deleting the quoted instance
  • Deleted.
  • The mention of G class at the end of the first paragraph should be hypenated for consistency with the lead
  • The format depends on whether it is a noun (no hyphen) or adjective (hyphen).
  • length, beam and draught dimensions inconsistent with infobox, ditto installed power
  • Good spot. Amended.
  • the text also refers to "three 3 in (76 mm) QF 12-pounder 12 cwt guns" but the "3 in" is missing from the infobox
  • Added.

Construction and career

  • No mention of commissioning although this is stated in the infobox as being in August 1910
  • Oops. Amended.
  • {{xt|in the Beagle's forming the}}: this threw me initially, but I think you mean the class of Beagles? Suggest revising this to make it clearer
  • Fixed.
  • {{xt|Mosquito left Plymouth}}: no antedence for Plymouth
  • Clarified.
  • {{xt|Second Division of the Fifth Flotilla and based in Alexandria}}: "Fifth Destroyer Flotilla"?
  • Added.

Bibliography/Source checks

  • "Volume" is inconsistently presented in the two Corbett refs
  • Corrected, along with the publisher name.
  • There is an errant ampersand in Note 11. Ditto Note 42
  • Removed.
  • Dittmar listed but doesn't seem cited. Same for Moore, Same for Parkes
  • Removed Moore and added statements from Dittmar & Colledge and Parkes & Prendergast
  • The link for Monograph No. 4 doesn't work
  • Fixed.
  • Checking Note 24, this doesn't say that Mosquito was one of the three destroyers sent to the southern end of the Straits of Messina
  • Amended to relevant service.
  • Notes 10, 26 and 27 check out OK

Other stuff

  • One dupe link: Fairfield Shipbuilding and Engineering Company
  • Removed.
  • Image tag OK

Spotted a few obvious typos as I went along and corrected these, otherwise that's it for me. Zawed (talk) 11:44, 6 January 2024 (UTC)

{{ping|Zawed}} Thank you for such an excellent review. I have made the changes. simongraham (talk) 07:58, 9 January 2024 (UTC)

:This looks all good so am passing as GA as I believe the article meets the necessary criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 03:21, 16 January 2024 (UTC)