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Talk:Harold North/GA1

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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 16:03, 22 September 2022 (UTC)

Will review shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 16:03, 22 September 2022 (UTC)

=Prelim=

  • No edit wars
  • No duplicated links (bar postnom)
  • Images correctly licensed
  • Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

=Lede and infobox=

  • Link sortie
  • Link dogfight
  • Could mention in the lede that he later flies Spitfires, right now it suggests that he only flew Hurricanes
  • Don't believe nicknames need to be italicized
  • Operation Dynamo could be added to the infobox, being separate to the BoB
  • His service number (in LGs etc) can be added to infobox

:*All the above done. Zawed (talk) 08:29, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

=Early life=

:*Done. Zawed (talk) 08:35, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

  • Barrister and solicitor are different roles, why do they have the same link?

:*In NZ, a lawyer can be both, I have several colleagues who are. The barrister article mentions this in the last paragraph of the lead. Zawed (talk) 08:35, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

:*Done. Zawed (talk) 08:35, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

  • Why was his acceptance provisional?

:*I believe it is because it was contingent on him passing flight training. Zawed (talk) 08:35, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

  • You link the "civilian flying school" to RAF Prestwick which doesn't immediately make sense

:*I doublechecked the source on this and it turns I was being a bit too literal. It was a reserve flying school, not a civilian one. Have rephrased. Zawed (talk) 08:44, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

  • You've left the "RAF" before Uxbridge, which I think is against your usual practice

:*Fixed. Zawed (talk) 08:35, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

  • "More advanced flying training followed" Why not include location(s) for this training too?

:*I *think* it was still at Hullavington, but the source isn't explicit on this. Zawed (talk) 08:44, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

=Second World War=

:*Done. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

  • "The squadron was based at Scapa Flow" I was a little confused when reading this (aren't they at Acklington?); suggest rewording sentence to begin with the date of move

:*Rephrased as suggested. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

:*Done. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

  • "the following month it was back at Tangmere" The article does not make it obvious that the squadron had moved away from Tangmere in this period, which is what I assume this means

:*Rephrased. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

:*Done. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

  • Not clear what "a section" would be - is this a flight?

:*Linked - there is a section in the linked article for usage in air forces. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

:*Done. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

:*Done. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

  • Did North see any operational flying with 96 Sqn?

:*Probably but the sources don't explicitly say. I've add mention of a course that he attended during his time there.

:* Done. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

:* Done. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

  • Practice suggests you should add what bombers he was escorting, if possible

:*Sources don't provide this info. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

:*Done. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

  • Could be useful to expand on the tally uncertainty - which kills are the dodgy ones?

:*I have attempted to clarify. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

=References=

  • References look good.

{{ping|Zawed}} Hi, that's my initial run through completed. Will await replies. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 09:40, 2 October 2022 (UTC)

:{{ping|Pickersgill-Cunliffe}}, thanks for the detailed review. I have responded to your various points above, and this is ready for you to take another look. Thanks again, Zawed (talk) 09:23, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

::{{ping|Zawed}} Looks good. My only quibble is that the service number needs a reference. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 17:12, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

:::Done, I added mention of it in the main body rather than cite it only in the infobox. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 4 October 2022 (UTC)

::::Happy to pass this article as satisfying the GA criteria. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 16:03, 4 October 2022 (UTC)