Talk:Haskell canoe/GA1

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:25, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

Am reviewing for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 13:25, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.
2. :a (prose): {{GAList/check|y}} b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): {{GAList/check|y}}
3. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
4. :a (reference section): {{GAList/check|y}} b (citations to reliable sources): {{GAList/check|y}} c (OR): {{GAList/check|y}}
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6. It is broad in its coverage.
7. :a (major aspects): {{GAList/check|y}} b (focused): {{GAList/check|y}}
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9. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
10. :Fair representation without bias: {{GAList/check|y}}
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12. It is stable.
13. :No edit wars, etc.: {{GAList/check|y}}
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15. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
16. :a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): {{GAList/check|y}} b (appropriate use with suitable captions): {{GAList/check|y}}
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18. Overall:
19. :Pass/Fail: {{GAList/check|y}}
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• The lead could be expanded from just three sentences to more about when it was stopped being built.

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• Briefly describe who Henry L. Haskell is to the uninitated

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• "Haskell made his business cards from pieces of the waterproof plywood which read," - This needs to be cited to a reliable source

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• Think the text of the business cards should be more centrally aligned with each other

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• "meaning king of the water." - in what language?

:{{Done}} - removed, as I can not get access now to micro-filmed newspaper because the library is closed. I reworded that first paragraph accordingly.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:56, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

• "The glue Haskell invented[5] was with co-developer H.F. John and made from dried cow's blood." - early or mid-sentence citations are not needed. Should be moved to the end of the sentence

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• "It was subjected to various tests to make sure" - {{xt|ensure}}

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• "After getting good results from these experiments and tests, then the glue was used in the making of the plywood that constructed the boats." - {{xt|the glue was employed in the making of the plywood used in the construction of the boats.}}

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• "three-sixteenths of an inch thick." - the convert template could be used on the text indiciated in bold

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• "and then pressed into a canoe form by a machine." - what type of machine?

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• "The final construction was to" - {{xt|final process of construction}}

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• "The name of the manufacturer was the Haskell Boat Company and was an organization under the management of the Haskell Manufacturing Company." - {{xt|Haskell Boat Company, which was an organization managed by the Haskell Manufacturing Company.}}

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• "to a 17 foot long canoe instead of the original 16 foot boat." - the convert templates would be better off used on the text denoted in bold

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• "They were no longer made after 1934." - what was the reason for no longer building the canoes?

:{{Done}} - removed.

• "One testimonial of 1930 from a tour guide of Kodiak Island in Alaska said that he used this canoe with much success." - much success with what exactly?

:{{Done}} bear hunting

• Reference 10's work should be "Daily News" and the page number is missing

:{{Done}} - removed.

• Reference 11 is missing the page number and the fact it comes from Newspapers.com

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Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 14:18, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

• {{ping|MWright96}} All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:08, 8 October 2020 (UTC)
• {{reply|Doug Coldwell}} Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 07:53, 9 October 2020 (UTC)
• Another blind-leading-the-blind review, this time of an article based entirely on primary sources and WP:ROUTINE coverage of a product. And whence in hell, other than some marketeer's bull shit fantasy, comes the idea that "Arex" means "King of the Water"? In what language or culture? EEng 00:44, 22 September 2022 (UTC)