Talk:I Invented Sex/GA2

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Reviewer: CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 19:17, 13 October 2010 (UTC)

• "I Invented Sex" is a song by American R&B singer Trey Songz. It features Canadian recording artist Drake. - Making this one sentence would be better, such as "I Invented Sex is a song by American R&B singer Trey Songz, and features Canadian recording artist Drake." or something similar.

:Done

• The song was written by the two with Tony Scales and its producer, Los Da Mystro. - Would be better "Together, they wrote the song alongside Tony Scales and ...."

:Done

• It was released to urban airplay as the third single from Songz' third studio album Ready on October 13, 2009. - Re-write. You say "third" twice, and it should be urban airplay stations.

:Partially done. I don't see any issue with using 'third' twice.

::I re-edited because urban airplay stations is very incorrect. MediaBase outlets such as AllAccess and FMQB dub a song going for adds as being available or release to "airplay" Candyo32 02:42, 19 October 2010 (UTC)

• sensual feel - Sensual message?

:Done

• reached forty-two - reached number forty-two

:Done

• Is there a source for where is was recorded?

::The liner notes. I've added the information into the background so it could be sourced outside the infobox. Candyo32 00:11, 17 October 2010 (UTC)

• of R&B group - From the, or of the

:Don't see the problem here

::I think I see what Adabow meant. But Day26 isn't a member from the group or the group, Day26 is the group. Candyo32 00:09, 17 October 2010 (UTC)

• Looks good

• debuted on the Billboard Hot 100 at number ninety - debuted at number ninety....

:Done

• It spent twenty weeks on the chart, with the chart stay spanning from 2009 to 2010, with it falling off the chart on the week ending March 10, 2010 - Re-write for clarity

:Done

• The song also topped the Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs chart, making it Songz' first number one the chart - don't mention chart twice in a sentence

:Done

• It carries a parental advisory warning. Drake does not appear in the music video. - It reads like a list

:Done

• Drake joined Songz to perform it at West Hollywood's House of Blues in January - Re-write

:Done

• Almost every sentence begins with "he performed it" and "he again performed it". - You should switch it up a bit.

Overall, good job Candy. These fixes shouldn't take you long. Drop me off a message when your done :)--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 19:44, 13 October 2010 (UTC)

:I've jumped in so that you can finally get this GT done, Candyo. There are still a few things to do, though. Adabow (talk · contribs) 23:53, 16 October 2010 (UTC)

::I think everything has been addressed now. Candyo32 14:18, 17 October 2010 (UTC)

::The article Passed--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 00:12, 20 October 2010 (UTC)