Talk:Jerry Dybzinski/GA1

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| result = Passed. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 21:54, 17 August 2024 (UTC)

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Nominator: {{User|Wizardman}} 00:49, 6 August 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 16:43, 17 August 2024 (UTC)

A very neat and tidy article, thanks for the opportunity to review, hope it's okay. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 16:43, 17 August 2024 (UTC)

• {{tq|felt comfortable enough with his development that they}} unnecessary.
• Don't love the triple repetition of "the season" in 1.5 sentences from {{tq|He struggled on offense during most of the season... he played during the season}}, consider {{tq|He struggled on offense during most of the season, however}} -> {{tq|Despite struggling on offense,}}
• {{tq|An injury to Veryzer gave Dybzinski more playing time in the second half of the season (the}} this is a bit sports radio rather than Wikipedia, consider {{tq|When Veryzer was injured, Dybzinski gained more playing time (the}}
• {{tq|which gave Dybzinski the inside track}} bit too idiomatic
• {{tq|wound up being the most}} was
• {{tq|and decided to retire from professional baseball}} retired
• {{tq|where he lived with his wife and three children}} ominous, attribute a date

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• [21] {{y}}
• [23] {{y}}

• Image appropriately tagged {{y}}
• No OR/COPYVIO {{y}}: Earwig 13.8%, hard to paraphrase short sequences
• Stable {{y}}
• Neutral {{y}}
• Broad/summary style {{y}}

• {{tq|after a season-ending injury to Duane Kuiper}} -> {{tq|after Duane Kuiper incurred a season-ending injury}}

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 16:43, 17 August 2024 (UTC)

All issues fixed. Thanks for the review. Wizardman 21:51, 17 August 2024 (UTC)

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