Talk:Joseph Hobson/GA1

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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 22:04, 1 October 2020 (UTC)

Happy to review this one.

====Lead section / Infobox====

:* Link Great Western Railway (there’s a choice, I’m not sure which one you need).

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:32, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

:* Link Grand Trunk Railway.

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:32, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

:* Unlink first in 'first St. Clair railway tunnel'.

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:32, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

:* The lead section needs to have more about Hobson's life.

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:32, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

:::(not done)

:*{{Done}} - Expanded lead further. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:55, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

:* I don’t think it’s a problem for this article, but just to say that image is clearly copyright, but the source cannot be verified.

:*{{Done}} Replaced with 1909 public domain image, with link --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:32, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

====Early life and education====

:* {{xt|...for a provincial land surveyor.}} - needs to be copy edited to improve the prose.

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:37, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

====Engineering career====

:* Link Wellington, Grey and Bruce Railway; International Railway Bridge (in the text and in the caption); electric trains (Electric locomotive).

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:05, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

:::(not done)

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:07, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

:* 'Engineering' in the title is redundant.

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:05, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

:::(not done)

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:07, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

:* {{xt|...onsite resident engineer…}} - wouldn’t either onsite or resident be redundant here?

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:05, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

:* {{xt|...half mile long…}} - should be ‘...half-mile (0.80 km) long…’,

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:05, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

:* {{xt|When this project was done…}} - ‘On its completion…’ sounds better imo.

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:05, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

:* Convert 6,025 feet; 11,500 feet.

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:05, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

:* There are two many images of the tunnel in the gallery. As the topic is about Hobson and not the St Clair tunnel, I would only use one.

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:05, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

====Personal life====

:* {{xt|Hobson was a member of the Canadian and American Societies of Civil Engineers and a member of the Institution of Civil Engineers of London, England.}} - is the wrong section.

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

:* {{xt|He also was a member in the Caledon Mountain Trout Club.}} is not noteworthy, and needs to be edited out.

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

:* {{xt|...when 84 years old.}} - amend to ‘...at the age of 84.’ to improve the prose.

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

:* I would expect there to be more biographical details, which may be available from Irwin or elsewhere. If I find any, I'll pass them on.

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

:::(not done)

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:59, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

====References====

:* The url in Refs 2 (Irwin) and 4 (OALS) don’t work.

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:02, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

:* The url to Ref 5 (Cook) is unnecessary, as it doesn't give access to the text.

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:02, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

====Sources====

:* Link Joseph Nathan Kane; William D. Middleton; Ramsay Cook.

:*{{Done}} --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:09, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

On hold for a week until 10 October to allow time to address the issues. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 18:15, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

:*{{ping|Amitchell125}} All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:09, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

:::A few points still outstanding; thanks for your work so far. Amitchell125 (talk) 07:07, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

::::*{{ping|Amitchell125}} All further issues addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:01, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

Looks fine now. Article passed, well done. Amitchell125 (talk) 15:14, 3 October 2020 (UTC)