Talk:Key House/GA1

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Reviewer: Bruxton (talk · contribs) 16:22, 5 March 2024 (UTC)

I am happy to review this article.Bruxton (talk) 16:22, 5 March 2024 (UTC)

:{{ping|APK}} I think I have completed the review and I await your edits and response. Bruxton (talk) 22:31, 5 March 2024 (UTC)

::{{ping|APK}} Thank you. I will be traveling tomorrow so if we have a delay I will not get back to the nomination until the 18th. Bruxton (talk) 18:35, 6 March 2024 (UTC)

:::Sorry for the delay {{ping|Bruxton}}, I've had real life events keeping me occupied. I'll work on this today. APK hi :-) (talk) 19:32, 13 March 2024 (UTC)

:::Ok, I think all of your concerns have been addressed. By the way, thanks for taking the time to review the article. APK hi :-) (talk) 20:37, 13 March 2024 (UTC)

:{{ok}} Consider adding a {{short description|?}}

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:{{ok}} "The house is where Key left in September 1814 to retrieve a kidnapped doctor during the War of 1812" consider "In September 1814 Key left this house to retrieve a kidnapped doctor during the War of 1812" or something that reads better?

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:{{ok}} The lead presents a good summary of the article and all of the information is repeated and cited in the body

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:{{ok}} the kitchen and dining room.. might be extra puncuation

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:{{ok}} "destruction to the area when British attacked the nation's capital" British probably needs a determiner "the"

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:{{ok}} "Key learnt of a doctor" might be better to use American English because the subject is American

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:{{ok}} "renamed the The Star-Spangled Banner," extra determiner

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:{{ok}} "great-grandon" spelling

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:{{ok}} "The Key House in 1931 showing the drastic" consider shows

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:{{ok}} "Key-Smith said" should be followed by a comma

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:{{ok}} " offered the suggestion of" consider replacing with just "suggested"

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:{{ok}} "approximately 5O per cent" percent should be one word - and 50 may be using a letter "o"?

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:{{ok}} "NPS historian Barry Mackintosh said" should be followed by a comma

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:{{ok}} "said to be two-feet (0.6 m) thick while interior walls were eighteen-inches (46 cm) thick." consider {{cvt|2|ft}} and {{cvt|18|in|cm}}

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:{{ok}} "floorplan" for this use should probably be two words

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:{{ok}} "fell far short of the $25,000 goal" consider an inflation template ({{Inflation|US|2000|1977|r=0|fmt=eq}})

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:{ok}} Same as above "at a cost of $100,000"

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:{{ok}} Same as above "In 1948, Congress approved $65,00"

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:{{ok}} It is not a must but you can consider adding these templates to dollar figures. I find them interesting

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:{{ok}} "Perched on a slope beside the Potomac River, the house was three-and-a-half stories tall facing the river, with the façade being two-and-a-half stories" consider "The home was perched on a slope beside the Potomac River. It was three-and-a-half stories tall and it faced the river; the façade was two-and-a-half stories

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:{{ok}} "In addition to his work in law," consider in addition to his legal work or similar

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:{{ok}} "Beanes, that had been arrested by British troops" consider "who had been"

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:{{ok}} "renamed the The Star-Spangled Banner, which is the national anthem of the United States" consider "which later became the national anthem of the United States"

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:{{ok}} "argued for the defense of slavery" consider "in defense"

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:{{ok}} "he left the public spotlight" seems colloquial consider "left public life"

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:{{ok}} "After Key's death in 1843" to avoid repetition consider "In the years following Key's death in 1843" or similar

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:{{ok}} "by his heirs for around ten years" can we nail down a specific time?

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:{{ok}} "Due to its location in an undesirable area at the time" this line seems clumsy and inexact, consider rewriting

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:{{ok}} "altered the Key House's appearance" consider rewrite to "altered the appearance of the Key House"

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:{{ok}} "Amongst the donated items" We should use American English as mentioned above

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:{{ok}} "The plan was to demolish it all" the language here is inexact, consider being specific

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:{{ok}} "but after a local outcry about saving" here outcry seems colloquial and not encyclopedic

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:{{ok}} "raising funds to restore the house fell far short" fell far short, consider more exact encyclopedic language

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:{{ok}} "The Key House was a brick colonial that was two-and-a-half stories" consider "and" instead of "that"

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:{{ok}} Early history section Citation 1 supports the text

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:{{ok}} Citations 2 and 3 are offline AGF

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:{{ok}} War of 1812 section citations support the text

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:{{ok}} Citation 5 supports the text well-known, the citation says famous

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:{{ok}} Key's life after the war - citations match the text

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:{{ok}} Mid-to-late 19th-century spot checked citations match the text

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:{{ok}} Keep in mind that the sourceThe Daily Beast WP:DAILYBEAST is yellow so it cannot be used for controversial information. I see that you used it for three items - all uncontroversial

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:{{ok}} Mid-to-late 19th-century - the last sentence in this section - you have interpreted the reference in the best way possible. {{thumbsup}}.

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:{{ok}} 20th-century the first, second, third, fouth paragraph citations line up with text

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:{{ok}} 20th-century The section and much of the article rely on citation 1 - but all of the citations line up in with the text

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:{{ok}} Final years spot checked citations in the section line up

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:{{ok}} Memorial park section, I am unable tom access the citations AGF

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:{{ok}} Design citations support the text

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:{{ok}} Earwig is at 50% and it is because the nominator used several long quotes. Not an issue

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:{{ok}} :File:Key House 1931.jpg is a non free and the summary and license seems incomplete. I updated it with appropriate language

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:{{ok}} There are 9 images in the article and the other ones are properly licensed

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