Talk:Nicky Jam/GA1
GA Review
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Reviewer: Truflip99 (talk · contribs) 18:50, 25 May 2020 (UTC)
Will start this soon. --truflip99 (talk) 18:50, 25 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|the latter three from his 2017 album Fénix.}} -- of which the latter three are*
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|He is also known for making romantic songs within the reggaeton genre.[1]}} -- I listen to his music and I would challenge this claim. Most reggaeton music is like this. Also, the ref you provided doesn't exactly support this statement. I suggest omitting altogether.
::{{done-t}} I removed the sentence. I do think it is important to have information about his musical/lyrical style in the lead, but I will try to come up with something better. Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|the release of the singles "Voy a Beber" and "Travesuras" in 2014}} -- duplicate link
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|His success was furthered by the 2015 single "El Perdón" and his 2017 album Fénix.}} -- dup link
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|Nicky Jam has also acted in the films XXX: Return of Xander Cage (2017) and Bad Boys for Life (2020)}} -- comma after this
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|Nick Rivera Caminero was born on March 17, 1981}} -- comma after full date
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|in Lawrence, Massachusetts}} -- also good practice to link first instance of a wiki page in body
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|to a Dominican mother and Puerto Rican father.}} -- link DR and PR
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|Having been born on Saint Patrick's Day}} -- link St. Patty's Day
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|he developed an affinity for hip-hop}} -- link hip hop
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|However, in interview}} -- in an* interview
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|with Billboard}} -- link Billboard
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|Nicky Jam initially experienced culture shock}} -- link culture shock
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|having never spoken Spanish}} -- link Spanish language
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|was inspired to pursue a musical career.}} -- became* inspired
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|He also used Caribbean hip-hop and reggaeton}} -- link reggaeton
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|him to try cocaine}} -- link cocaine
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|little Mickey Mouse voice}} -- link Mickey Mouse
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|he continued to release the solo albums Haciendo Escante (2001) and Vida Escante (2004).}} -- Nicky Jam went on* to release
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|on-and-off}} -- I don't think you need the hyphens as this isn't a compound modifier
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|This led an incensed Nicky Jam to release a diss track in response in 2004.}} -- 2004 redundant, use "that same year"?
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)
More in a bit. --truflip99 (talk) 16:26, 28 May 2020 (UTC)
Thanks so much for your comments. I'll get right on it! Basilisk4u (talk) 00:39, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
Great progress! Continue:
- {{tq|and soon after began touring together at the end of 2014.}} -- I would omit "soon after"
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|His increased popularity during this time led to Nicky Jam reuniting}} -- led Nicky Jam to reunite*
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|My bodyguard was like, ‘There's this woman outside. She's fighting with everybody saying she's your mom and she wants to see you...}} -- you forgot to close the quote
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|The album reached the top of the Billboard Latin Rhythm Albums chart on February 11, 2017}} -- comma after date
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq| to the new singles "El Amante" and "Si Tú la Ves" featuring Wisin of reggaeton duo Wisin & Yandel}} -- "Si Tú la Ves", the latter featuring...
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|"sound has shifted from hard-hitting dembow...to more velvety rhythms and romantic lyrics."}} -- period after quote
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|he recalls that "I knew automatically}} -- he recalls, "I knew..."
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|The artist was first exposed to Caribbean music occurred upon}} -- The artist's first exposure to Caribbean music...
::{{done-t}} Oh my goodness! Thanks for catching that. Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)
- {{tq|Jay-Z's The Blueprint (2001) "gave [him] an idea of how to do [his] albums in the Spanish market and give [his] fans that kind of vibe."}} -- period after quote
::{{done-t}} Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)
Good on prose. I will look at images and refs next. --truflip99 (talk) 21:02, 1 June 2020 (UTC)
- Awesome, thanks!! Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)
Hey thank you so much for your comments. I am a teacher and am just finishing up the last week of virtual teaching. I will get to your comments as soon as possible! Basilisk4u (talk) 22:16, 15 June 2020 (UTC)
{{ping|Basilisk4u}} Looking good!
- No license issues for pics
- Refs -- Link Billboard on first instance and remove any duplicates
- Add accessdate to refs 31 and 40
That should be it. Placing on hold. --truflip99 (talk) 15:09, 17 June 2020 (UTC)
Perfect, I made the changes and I think I caught all the duplicate Billboard links. Let me know if there's anything else I should do. Thanks so much for the review :) Basilisk4u (talk) 15:55, 17 June 2020 (UTC)
: Looks great! Passing. --truflip99 (talk) 16:08, 17 June 2020 (UTC)