Talk:One in a Million (Bebe Rexha and David Guetta song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Benmite (talk · contribs) 04:17, 3 March 2024 (UTC)

Hi there! Gonna be reviewing this very soon. :) benǝʇᴉɯ 04:17, 3 March 2024 (UTC)

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Gonna be honest, this is gonna take a lot to pass GA, but I think it can. I've started to leave a lot of edits below. benǝʇᴉɯ 20:07, 10 March 2024 (UTC)

:I also think it could benefit from more sources.

Can you add some, preferably of Rexha and Guetta?

18.0%, good!

• Remove {{tquote|and songwriter}}

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• Change {{tquote|disc jockey}} to {{tquote|record producer}}

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• Change {{tquote|by the latter two along with}} to {{tquote|Rexha and

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• Change {{tquote|The song was written by the latter two along with Burns, Martin Coogan, Scott Dittrich, Timofey Reznikov, Sarah Solovay and Ido Zmishlany, with the production completed by Guetta, Timofey Reznikov and Burns.}} to {{tquote|The song was written by Rexha, Martin Coogan, Scott Dittrich, Sarah Solovay, and Ido Zmishlany and produced by Burns, Timofey Reznikov, and Guetta, all three of whom also wrote the song.}}

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• Change {{tquote|Representing the artist's fifth collaboration}} to {{tquote|The fifth collaboration between Rexha and Guetta}}

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• Change {{tquote|Incorporating an interpolation of Guetta's single "When Love Takes Over", the song combines club, dance, EDM and pop music.}} to {{tquote|The EDM and pop song samples Guetta's 2009 single "When Love Takes Over".}}

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• Change {{tquote|Its lyrics are an homage to love with Rexha marveling at the existence of a significant other.}} to {{tquote|In its lyrics, Rexha marvels at the existence of her significant other.}}

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• Change {{tquote|garnered a warm reception}} to {{tquote|received positive reviews}}

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• Remove pipe for music critics

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• Spell out nine

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• Change {{tquote|US}} to {{tquote|U.S.}}

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• Add {{tquote|chart}} after {{tquote|Hot Dance/Electronic Songs}}

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• Remove non-notable Belgium and Netherlands chart positions from lead

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• Change {{tquote|garnered a nomination}} to {{tquote|was nominated}}

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• Change {{tquote|the 66th edition of the Grammy Awards}} to {{tquote|the 66th Annual Grammy Awards}} with the pipe

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• Change {{tquote|Furthermore, a live rendition of the song took place}} to {{tquote|Rexha and Guetta performed the song live}}

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• Add {{tquote|at}} before {{tquote|the closing ceremony}}

• Change {{tquote|Rexha previewed "One in a Million" on the social media platform TikTok by sharing a brief snippet of the song.}} to {{tquote|Rexha shared a brief snippet of "One in a Million" on the social media platform TikTok.}}

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• Do we have better sources than Apple Music and Spotify for the release date/format and the writing and production credits?

• Specify which countries it was released in

• Add Timofey Reznikov after {{tquote|Produced by}}

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• Change {{tquote|that builds on the success of their previous works such as}} to {{tquote|following their songs}}

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• New paragraph starting with {{tquote|Inspired by house music}}

• Change {{tquote|Characterised by an infusion of house sounds,}} to {{tquote|Inspired by house music}} with the pipe

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• Remove {{tquote|club, dance}} (the first redirects to EDM, EDM is a subgenre of dance music)

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:* Change {{tquote|a combination of club, dance, EDM and pop music}} to {{tquote|an EDM and pop song}} with pre-existing pipes

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• Change {{tquote|interpolates}} to {{tquote|samples}} per sources (both sources at the end of the sentence refer to it as a sample, not an interpolation)

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benǝʇᴉɯ 20:05, 10 March 2024 (UTC)

• Change {{tquote|Guetta's collaboration with American singer Kelly Rowland "When Love Takes Over" (2009)}} (Rowland is featured per refs, not an addt'l artist) to {{tquote|Guetta's 2009 single "When Love Takes Over" featuring American singer Kelly Rowland}} with pipe for Kelly Rowland

• Remove {{tquote|placing emphasis on the exploration of profound connections}} and the last sentence with the lyrics—neither are supported by sources—and the refs that follow benǝʇᴉɯ 04:30, 14 March 2024 (UTC)

• Change wording of {{tquote|marvels at the existence of a significant other}} (identical to [https://www.rollingstone.com/music/music-news/bebe-rexha-david-guetta-one-in-a-million-single-1234800711/ Rolling Stone wording] to {{tquote|is amazed by her significant other's existence}}

• New paragraph starting with {{tquote|Inspired by house music...}}

• Change {{tquote|Chris Vuoncino from We Rave You highlighted the song for its quality that encapsulates the "iconic" collaboration between Rexha and Guetta.}} to {{tquote|Chris Vuoncino of We Rave You praised "One in a Million" as "an infectious pop single that perfectly encapsulates [Guetta and Rexha's] iconic work together",}}

:* Remove extra ref at the end of this sentence

• Change {{tquote|He also acclaimed its "timeless" melody and lyrics, Rexha's "radio-friendly" vocal delivery and Guetta's "pristine" production quality.}} to {{tquote|He also acclaimed its "timeless chorus melody and lyrics", Rexha's "radio-friendly vocals", and Guetta's "pristine production work".}}

• Add commas after {{tquote|Zemler}} and before {{tquote|commended}}

• Change {{tquote|the collaborative effort as "buoyant", acknowledging its "anthemtic and club-ready" qualities.}} to {{tquote|the song as "buoyant", "anthemtic [sic]", and "club-ready".}}

• Remove first Los 40 quote or pick quote that is more opinionated

• Commas after {{tquote|González}} and {{tquote|Los 40}}

:* Remove {{tquote|also}} if you remove the first quote

• Remove {{tquote|"pure expression" with}}

:* Change {{tquote|identified the song's distinctive features, describing them as a}} to {{tquote|wrote that the song had}}

• Add commas after {{tquote|Jovi Marques}} and {{tquote|Papelpop}}

:* Remove {{tquote|the song's dynamic progression and}}

• Remove NRJ quote, not really a review

• Remove BuzzFeed mention

• For Billboard list, pull a quote or paraphrase from the list entry, and rewrite the sentence as {{tquote|For its 2023 list of the 30 best dance songs of the year, Billboard{{'}}s Krystal Rodriguez wrote...}}

• Change {{tquote|Representing Rexha's fourth and Guetta's 13th nomination to date, the song garnered a nomination in the inaugural category of Best Pop Dance Recording at the 66th edition of the Grammy Awards.}} to {{tquote|"One in a Million" was nominated for the inaugural Grammy Award for Best Pop Dance Recording at the 66th Annual Grammy Awards, marking Rexha's fourth and Guetta's 13th nomination at the time.}}

:* Remove ref 16 (redundant)

:* Move ref 14 to the end of the sentence

• Start new section titled Commercial performance starting with {{tquote|"One in a Million" made its debut...}}

• Spell out nine, change US to U.S.

• Better, non-primary sourcing for the chart dates would be ideal

• Remove last sentence benǝʇᴉɯ 05:35, 14 March 2024 (UTC)

• Is there a better source for the release date of the music video than the video itself?

• Change {{tquote|A cyberspace and futuristic-themed video, it was directed by Corey Wilson and produced by Erica Gould.}} to {{tquote|The futuristic, cyberspace-themed video was directed by Corey Wilson and produced by Erica Gould.}}

:* Remove pipe for futuristic per MOS:OL

• Per WP:PLOTCITE, it's fine to only use the music video as a source for its own plot, but since this isn't really an MV with a plot per se, it would be best to find a secondary source to describe the visuals to avoid WP:NPOV (even if the visuals are not that contentious)

• The summary of the video should be cut down considerably

• Remove Mier and Luiz's commentary, doesn't add anything beyond what is already described in the second sentence

• New paragraph starting with BBMAs performance

:* Change {{tquote|premiered their collaboration}} to {{tquote|performed}} and add {{tquote|live}} after {{tquote|"One in a Million"}}

:* Extend description of BBMAs performance using the three sources at the end

: Change {{tquote|Another live rendition from both artists occurred}} to {{tquote|They also performed the song}}

:* Add date of World Cup performance

Looks good.

Also looks good. benǝʇᴉɯ 20:41, 15 March 2024 (UTC)

• Sources for Spotify and Apple Music should be |via=

• Pipe for Official Charts Company, no need for (OCC) afterwards

• Is there a Billboard ref for the BBMAs other than the video? Preferably an article with an author

• Everything else looks okay!

Sincerest apologies that it took nearly two weeks for me to complete this review, I have been really swamped with real-life responsibilities! I hope you get the time to complete making the edits, but like I mentioned above, I think additional images and more sources would be necessary for it to pass as a GA, since it is relatively bare-bones right now. benǝʇᴉɯ 20:48, 15 March 2024 (UTC)

: Failing due to inactivity, but feel free to renominate! benǝʇᴉɯ 00:52, 27 March 2024 (UTC)