Talk:Pasir Ris MRT station/GA1
GA Review
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Reviewer: Willbb234 (talk · contribs) 18:19, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
Happy to give this a review for GA. Expect comments soon. Kind regards, Willbb234Talk (please {{ping}} me in replies) 18:19, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
=Lede=
- {{xt|as part of the MRT eastern line extension to this station}} what does 'this station' refer to here?
- {{xt|An incident happened in 2016 on the tracks away from the station which resulted in the deaths of two maintenance workers.}} I suggest changing this to {{xt|An incident on the tracks in 2016 resulted in the deaths of two maintenance workers.}} for conciseness.
- {{xt|an interchange with the Cross Island line (CRL)}} you should clarify that the CRL is upcoming and thus not currently in place.
=History=
- {{xt|was awarded to Sato Kogyo Pte Ltd}} 'Ltd' needs a period after it as it is an abbreviation.
- {{xt|on March 1986}} 'on' to 'in'.
- {{xt|The contract also includes the construction}} the contract was agreed in the past and thus this should read 'included'.
- {{xt|As announced by then-first deputy prime minister Goh Chok Tong}} he was the deputy prime minister, not the 'first deputy prime minister', see Deputy Prime Minister of Singapore. Also could do with a wikilink.
- {{xt|the station opened on 16 December when the EWL extends to Pasir Ris.}} this sentence doesn't quite make sense; there are some tense issues.
Sorry, but I have found quite a few grammatical issues and have only read the first four paragraphs. I believe that this article needs quite a bit of work and copyediting in order to meet the first bullet point of WP:GACR. I will therefore fail this article as it is a long way from meeting one of the GA criteria. I recommend that you request a copyedit at the Guild of Copyeditors and then re-nominate, as I'm sure that the article will pass. I hope you understand, if you have any questions please get in contact. Willbb234Talk (please {{ping}} me in replies) 22:02, 12 March 2021 (UTC)