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Talk:Pilot (Breaking Bad)/GA1

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Reviewer: Tayi Arajakate (talk · contribs) 06:08, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

==Meta discussion==

  • Hello, Some Dude From North Carolina. I will be the one to review this nomination, which I will present shortly. Hopefully, my feedback will be helpful. Tayi Arajakate Talk 06:08, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
  • :{{u|Some Dude From North Carolina}}, hey, so I've completed the review and the article is more or less a good article. There are a few minor issues which might need resolving so I'm putting it on hold for the time being. Tayi Arajakate Talk 13:20, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
  • ::{{u|Some Dude From North Carolina}}, I have looked over the changes and congratulations on getting this article to the status of a good article. I'll be passing it now. Tayi Arajakate Talk 20:08, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

==Assessment==

  1. Comprehension: The article is well written.
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    (a) (prose)There are some minor issues with prose. See comments below. (Resolved){{GAHybrid/item|good}}
    (b) (MoS)The article is compliant with the manual of style.{{GAHybrid/item|good}}

  2. Verifiability: The article is verifiable.
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    (a) (references)The article has appropiate in-line citations and a list of references{{GAHybrid/item|good}}
    (b) (citations to reliable sources)Sources used are reliable.{{GAHybrid/item|good}}
    (c) (original research)No original research found.{{GAHybrid/item|good}}
    (d) (copyvio and plagiarism)No copyright issues found, quotations are attributed.{{GAHybrid/item|good}}

  3. Comprehensiveness: The article is adequate in its comprehensiveness.
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    (a) (major aspects)The article covers all major aspects. Two potential issues found, see last two points in the comments. (Resolved){{GAHybrid/item|good}}
    (b) (focused)The article is on topic.{{GAHybrid/item|good}}

  4. Neutrality: The article is neutral.
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    No issues found concerning neutrality.{{GAHybrid/item|good}}

  5. Stability: The article is adequately stable.
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    The article is not the subject of any content disputes, edit warring or major changes at present.{{GAHybrid/item|good}}

  6. Illustration: The article is well illustrated.
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    (a) (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales)The representational image has valid fair use rationale.{{GAHybrid/item|good}}
    (b) (appropriate use with suitable captions)One clarification needed. (Resolved){{GAHybrid/item|good}}

==Comments==

  • Question about the image caption. It's been a long time since I saw the episode but is the caption accurate? As far as I remember, the trailer implied that he was preparing to confront the police but wasn't he simply preparing his gun to shoot himself? Tayi Arajakate Talk 06:59, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

::{{re|Tayi Arajakate}} Well, in the episode, Walter White points his gun towards the sounds of the sirens, questions this decision and attempts to commit suicide, and then points the gun again towards the sirens. I would say that per the timeline of the events, the caption is accurate. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:11, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

  • Suggestions:

:* The sentence {{!xt|"Jesse drives back to show his distributor, Krazy-8 but encounters Krazy-8's cousin, Emilio Koyama, who believes Jesse set him up during the drug bust."}} is a bit awkward. I would suggest either removing {{xt|"show"}} or adding {{xt|"to show the product to his distributor"}}.

::: {{Done}} Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

:* The sentence {{!xt|"However, The Hollywood Reporter revealed that same year that the pilot had in fact been watched by 1.41 million people instead."}} is a bit awkward as well. For instance the phrase {{xt|"that same year that the pilot"}}, it should also clarify that it was later in the same year.

::: {{Done}} Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

:* The quotations could be turned down a bit, for instance at the beginning of the section on production. Some of them could be re-worked as sentences narrating what Gilligan says instead of direct quotes.

::: {{Done}} Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

:* The last paragraph is a bit too blue link intensive. Maybe it can be re-worked in a chart format.

::: {{Done}} Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

:* The part referred to in the caption should be included in the plot too.

::: {{Done}} Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

:* The article could talk a bit more about RJ Mitte's casting if that is available and if there is other information available about the production.

::: {{Done}} Added information on the casting of Aaron Paul and Dean Norris. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

::::Oops, I meant that for the casting for Jesse Pinkman's role, not that of Walter Jr. Since, you have added it anyways, it's done now. Tayi Arajakate Talk 20:04, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

Tayi Arajakate Talk 13:13, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

:{{Re|Tayi Arajakate}} All done. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:10, 12 March 2021 (UTC)