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| result = Passed. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 20:15, 12 February 2025 (UTC)

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:This review is transcluded from Talk:Ray Jennison/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Nominator: {{User|BeanieFan11}} 20:35, 8 February 2025 (UTC)

Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 19:32, 9 February 2025 (UTC)

I'll take this one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 19:32, 9 February 2025 (UTC)

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#It is reasonably well written.

  1. :a (prose, spelling, and grammar): {{GAList/check|neu}}
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): {{GAList/check|neu}}
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check.
  3. :a (references): {{GAList/check|neu}}
    b (citations to reliable sources): {{GAList/check|y}}
    c (OR): {{GAList/check|y}}
    d (copyvio and plagiarism): {{GAList/check|y}}
  4. It is broad in its coverage.
  5. :a (major aspects): {{GAList/check|y}}
    b (focused): {{GAList/check|y}}
  6. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
  7. :Fair representation without bias: {{GAList/check|y}}
  8. It is stable.
  9. :No edit wars, etc.: {{GAList/check|y}}
  10. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
  11. :a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): {{GAList/check|y}}
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions): {{GAList/check|y}}
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Overall:

Pass/Fail: {{GAList/check|neu}}

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=Comments=

  • Regarding the first sentence, you need to clarify that American is his nationality. I think you do this on your other bios.
  • Sentence 3 and sentence 4 of the lead both start with "He later", can you switch one up?
  • I would just summarize "in Paris, France, and London, England." as "in Europe." in the lead.
  • {{tq|last name to "Jennison."}} I believe the quotation mark goes inside the period on this type of quote.
  • {{tq|Jennison played for South Dakota State's}} you add SDSU is the previous sentence, recommend using it here instead of spelling out the full school name again
  • {{tq|"huskiest linemen,"}}, same as above, I think the quote goes inside the comma
  • {{tq|Green Bay Packers of the National Football League}} you can just use "NFL" here
  • {{tq|He later remarried to Mary Garnett Jennison}} -> {{tq|He was later remarried to Mary Garnett Jennison}}
  • References:
  • Add access-dates to Ref 4, 18 and 25
  • Ref 16 is missing the {{para|via|Newspapers.com}}
  • References are consistently formatter and reliable for what is being cited
  • Spot checks: 3, 4, 7, 8, 15, 16, 23, 24, and 25 all checked out

Nice work {{U|BeanieFan11}}. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 15:53, 10 February 2025 (UTC)

  • {{ping|Gonzo fan2007}} I think I addressed everything. BeanieFan11 (talk) 19:50, 12 February 2025 (UTC)
  • Passed. Nice work! « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 20:15, 12 February 2025 (UTC)

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