Talk:Scott Laughton/GA1

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:57, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

Reviewing this for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive MWright96 (talk) 18:57, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.
2. :a (prose): {{GAList/check|y}} b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): {{GAList/check|y}}
3. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
4. :a (reference section): {{GAList/check|y}} b (citations to reliable sources): {{GAList/check|y}} c (OR): {{GAList/check|y}}
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6. It is broad in its coverage.
7. :a (major aspects): {{GAList/check|y}} b (focused): {{GAList/check|y}}
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9. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
10. :Fair representation without bias: {{GAList/check|y}}
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12. It is stable.
13. :No edit wars, etc.: {{GAList/check|y}}
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15. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
16. :a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): {{GAList/check|y}} b (appropriate use with suitable captions): {{GAList/check|y}}
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18. Overall:
19. :Pass/Fail: {{GAList/check|y}}
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• Wikilink junior hockey to the relevant article
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• "Following his sophomore season in the OHL," - OHL needs to be spelt out in full and the acroynms in parentheses
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• "to play junior in the Ontario Hockey League (OHL)." - word-to-word of the nj.com that will need a little rewording to pass limited wording
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• Wikilink lacrosse
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• The second wikilink for Oakville, Ontario is not needed
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• Goals and assists need to be wikilinked on the first mention for non-Ice hockey readers
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• "Laughton also skated in two games with the St. Michael's Buzzers of the CCHL." - The full name of the CCML will need to be written out
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• "As a result of his minor hockey play," - {{xt|achievements}}
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• "His play earned him a roster spot on the CHL/NHL Top Prospects Game[12]" - a comma is missing between "Game" and the citation
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• Wikilink point to the relevant article on the first mention only
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• "giving the Flyers five more games to decide whether he stays in the NHL or returns to major juniors." - {{xt|remained in the NHL to returned}}
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• "after failing to stick with the NHL club to start the season." - more formal; {{xt|remain}}
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• "for Team Canada at the 2013 World Junior Ice Hockey Championships." - {{xt|Team Canada's U20 team}}
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• "during the week of October 20." - phantomshockey.com source says the week ending October 19
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• "and was expected to miss 3–4 weeks" - {{xt|3 to 4 weeks}}
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• "the Flyers re-signed Laughton to a two-year, $1.925 million contract worth $962,500 annually." - the salary is not mentioned by the NHL source
• Replaced ref
• Wikilink penalty killer to the relevant article
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• Think the final paragraph can be split into two with the Laughton's activities in the Stanley Cup in its own paragraph
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• "Laughton suffered a broken finger at the start of the 2019–20 season" - perhaps mention it was a broken finger on his right hand
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• "A few games following his return," - how many games exactly?
• {{done}}. Changed to December
• "The team rewarded his efforts by gifting him the 2020 Pelle Lindbergh Memorial Trophy as the team's most improved player." - repetition of "team"
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• "When the NHL returned to play," - mention the season was delayed due to the COVID-19 pandemic as stated in The Hockey Writers
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• Wikilink Seed to Seed (sports)
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• "Laughton helped the team bounce back from a blown lead" - {{xt|recover from a lost lead}}
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• Wikilink shorthanded to the relevant article
• Already WL for penalty killer
• Wikilink shutout
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• Reference 6 is missing the author
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• Reference 18 is missing The Canadian Press as the agency
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• The hyphens in season in Reference 27 and the score in Reference 48 should be en dashes (–) per MOS:DASH
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• The author of Reference 38 should be formatted as Friedman, Elliott and the wikilnk be in the authorlink= field
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• Reference 46 is missing Associated Press as the agency
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• Reference 47 is missing the author
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• The first word in the title of Reference 51 should not be all in capital letters per MOS:ALLCAPS
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Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 20:41, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

:{{U|MWright96}}, done. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:21, 9 October 2020 (UTC)

:*{{reply|HickoryOughtShirt?4}} Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 07:53, 9 October 2020 (UTC)