Talk:Shea Weber/GA1

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Reviewer: Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 11:28, 10 January 2011 (UTC)

:GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.
2. :a (prose): {{GAList/check|yes}} b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): {{GAList/check|yes}}
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4. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
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7. It is broad in its coverage.
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10. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
11. :Fair representation without bias: {{GAList/check|yes}}
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13. It is stable.
14. :No edit wars, etc.: {{GAList/check|yes}}
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16. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
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20. :Pass/Fail: {{GAList/check|yes}}
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;Early life

• "Weber has a brother named Brandon..." Incohesive placement after death of mother. Maybe place in first paragraph after first mention of parents?{{done}}

;Junior career

• Being "listed" needs better explanation. Even expanding that to "protected list" conveys more meaning.{{done}}
• I feel like the second and third mention of "junior B" when describing the championships are unnecessary, given that it's previously established that the KIJHL is a junior B league.{{done}}
• How did the Rockets do in the Memorial Cup? And how did they qualify if they lost the WHL finals?{{done}}
• Replace some "Weber"s with "he".{{done}}

;Nashville Predators

• Goals and assists aren't linked in their first mentions in the article.{{done}} in previous section
• "rash of injuries" sounds a little bit like slang.{{done}}
• Exact same phrasing in sentences for NHL YoungStars Game and NHL All-Star Game. Mix it up?{{done}}
• Are games played and penalty minutes "offensive categories"? Maybe reword to "statistical categories"?{{done}}

;International play

• Saying that his experience at the '07 WC was "marred" by his suspension seems a little dramatic and POV. I also went ahead and removed "ugly" to help this along.{{done}}

;References

• A lot of publications that needs italics (ie. The Province) do not have them.{{done}}
• Spell out acronyms of publications (ie. CBC, TSN, IIHF). I know it seems tedious, but I think it's good practice. Also, it helps consistency if other publications like National Hockey League and Canadian Hockey League are spelled out.{{done}}
• Ref 39 needs a title.{{done}}
• Refs 17, 20, 21, 27, 42, 43, and 46 are dead.{{done}}

;Other

• Watch for redundancies in your prose. For example, writing the same word twice in a sentence. Fixed most, if not all, of these myself though.
• Disambig Dan Boyle and Sicamous.{{done}}

:All issues have been addressed, but please add any further feedback you may have! Thanks so much for the review! Cheers. – Nurmsook! ^talk... 23:14, 10 January 2011 (UTC)

::Sweet. Everything looks good, but just one more issue that I noticed on the second read: There are no season stats for his junior career in the prose. I think this could definitely add to the article, especially for his award-winning seasons in the WHL. Also, there is no mention of his WHL rookie season. Just this last issue to deal with and I'll pass the article! Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 00:16, 11 January 2011 (UTC)

:::Should be all good now. I can't believe I forgot that rookie season! It was his draft year for crying out loud. I knew I was missing something. – Nurmsook! ^talk... 03:57, 11 January 2011 (UTC)

::::Awesome. Looks good.. congrats! Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 08:43, 11 January 2011 (UTC)