Talk:Taruni Sachdev/GA1

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 09:58, 3 May 2020 (UTC)

Am going to be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 09:58, 3 May 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.
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• "Taruni Sachdev (14 May 1998 – 14 May 2012) was an Indian child actress. She appeared in Vellinakshatram (2004), Sathyam (2004), Paa (2009), Vetri Selvan (2014), and Kya Aap Paanchvi Pass Se Tez Hain? (2008)." - how about merging these two sentences together and change them accordingly
• "Sachdev made her film debut in 2004 with Vellinakshatram which made her endeared by the Malayalam audience." - {{xt|which endeared her to Malayalam audiences.}}
• "Her last film was Vetri Selvan (2012)," - delink Vetri Selvan since it is already linked in the previous paragraph and change the year to 2014
• "which was released after her death in 2012. " - {{xt|released two years after her death}}
• "near the Jomsom Airport, Nepal." - {{xt|near Jomsom Airport in Nepal}}
• "She had studied to class nine from the Bai Avabai Framji Petit Girls' High School." - {{xt|at Bai Avabai Framji Petit Girls' High School.}}

• "Taruni Sachdev was born on 14 May 1998 in Mumbai, India.[1][2] She was born to industrialist Haresh Sachdev and Geeta Sachdev.[3]" - how about merging these two sentences together for flow and shortening it a little accordingly?

• "Besides acting, Sachdev had appeared in more than fifty commercials.[1] She appeared in many advertisements of Colgate, ICICI Bank, Saffola oil, and Kesar Badam Milk.[1]" - merge these two sentences and shorten them accordingly
• The words action thriller, drama and thriller should be delinked
• "In 2009, Sachdev appeared in R. Balki's comedy-drama Paa.[6] Where she starred as Somi," - these two sentences are better off merged together; the word "Where" should not start with a capital letter
• "She appeared in many advertisements of" - {{xt|She appeared in television advertisements for the companies}}

• "near the Jomsom Airport, Nepal," -{{xt|near Jomsom Airport in Nepal,}}

• Title of Reference 11: "We Will Keep Taruni's Scenes As Remembrance - Taruni Sachdev - Vetri Selvan - Rudhran - Tamil Movie News"." - the text highlighted in bold must be delete because it is not necessary at all
• Reference 14 is missing Indo-Asian News Service as the agency
• Title of Reference 15: "Tears and chants mark Nepal crash victims' last rites | Mumbai News - Times of India" - the text in bold should be delete because it is unnecessary
• Reference 15 is missing the authors of the article

Am going to place the review on hold to allow the nominator time to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 11:41, 3 May 2020 (UTC)

:{{u|MWright96}}, All done. ~~ CAPTAIN MEDUSA^talk 12:25, 3 May 2020 (UTC)

::*{{reply|CAPTAIN MEDUSA}} Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 12:37, 3 May 2020 (UTC)

::*:{{u|MWright96}}, Thanks {{smiley face}}. ~~ CAPTAIN MEDUSA^talk 12:38, 3 May 2020 (UTC)