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Talk:The Level, Brighton/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 13:20, 21 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments

  • " south coast of the United Kingdom." yet infobox has it Brighton, England.
  • made it England Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • No need to link major geographical entities like United Kingdom (if it stays).
  • ok, England not linked Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • "for huge dinner " huge isn't particularly enecylopedic in tone.
  • we are talking over 7,000 people so i feel "huge" is justified, but i could change to "large-scale" as in the text if you prefer Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • I don't doubt the magnitude, just the tone. large-scale works for me. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 08:41, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • changed Mujinga (talk) 10:35, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • "cafés" no accent required, we've appropriated that word in English for some while now.
  • in British English I would argue either is fine
  • Well cafe is about ten times more prevalent and I'm not sure why we'd opt for a non-English variant. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 08:41, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • i'm not sure if it's exactly how i see it but Cafe (British) makes a distinction between café and cafe/greasyspoon/caff. Wikipedia:Diacritical marks (only an essay, not MoS) says both versions are ok Mujinga (talk) 10:35, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • Non-breaking space before ellipsis.
  • fixed, i think Mujinga (talk) 08:21, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • fixed better now Mujinga (talk) 10:35, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • "on the Steine " overlinked.
  • fixed Mujinga (talk) 08:21, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • "in 1787, The Level " etc surely "the Level" per "the Beatles" etc.
  • yes this was a recent edit which felt a bit odd, i was unsure here since sources like the council use "The Level", looking around I don't see any hard and fast rule here on wikipedia so changed to "the" Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • "50 years" personally would prefer fifty here.
  • per MOS:NUMERAL both versions are ok Mujinga (talk) 08:21, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • I know, but I'm just saying the numeral jars the flow. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 08:41, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • yes true, coming soon after "four years later" i see what you mean, i've rejigged and lost the 50 Mujinga (talk) 10:35, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • "Formation and history" section heading, perhaps "early history" (as you have "recent history")
  • that works! Mujinga (talk) 08:21, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • "King George IV " overlinked.
  • fixed Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • " the 8 acres" eight.
  • officially 8.05 so changed to that for consistency Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • "nowadays" doesn't feel encyclopedic in tone.
  • yes, changed to "today" Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • Park Crescent is overlinked.
  • fixed Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • " Victoria " overlinked.
  • off with his head! fixed Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • "Old Steine" overlinked (and suddenly Old)
  • fixed as above Mujinga (talk) 08:21, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • "scenes ... were" non-breaking space between scenes & ellipsis.
  • done, such a great quote! Mujinga (talk) 08:21, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • " mid- to late 19th" if you hyphenate mid, shouldn't you hyphenate late-?
  • agreed, then had a look around, seems fine for both to be unhyphenated Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • " playground " overlinked.
  • fixed Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • National Cycle route and buses mentioned in the infobox are not mentioned at all in the prose.
  • added to overview section Mujinga (talk) 08:21, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • "on September 1, 1984." date format inconsistent.
  • oops, fixed Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • "and The Levellers" -> "and the Levellers"
  • fixed Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • " skatepark " overlinked
  • it's linked in intro, overview and skatepark, so strictly the third mention should go but i'd like to keep it so skatepark is linked in its own section Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • Ok, no worries. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 08:41, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • "an elm tree" ditto, as is "Dutch elm disease".
  • fixed Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • " boccia and pétanque" both.
  • fixed Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • Could link sensory garden.
  • done Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • Avoid SHOUTING in ref titles.
  • FIXED Mujinga (talk) 08:02, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • Spaced hyphen in ref titles should be spaced en-dashes.
  • sorry could you give me an example? i'm not sure what this refers to Mujinga (talk) 08:21, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • " LUC - Environmental " should be " LUC – Environmental " for example. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 08:41, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • thanks, fixed for LUC and Cowley refs Mujinga (talk) 10:35, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
  • The single note could easily be integrated into the main prose.
  • good point, done Mujinga (talk) 08:21, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

That's it for a first run through, so it's on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 14:15, 22 April 2020 (UTC)

Bingo, good work, not going to die on a hill for cafe, so I'm happy to promote this, nice piece of work. Well done. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 10:37, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

  • :::: Great! Thanks for the review, see you down at the Level when the pandemic is finally over :) Mujinga (talk) 12:25, 23 April 2020 (UTC)