Talk:Vince Dunn/GA1

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 16:58, 27 May 2020 (UTC)

Will be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 16:58, 27 May 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.
2. :a (prose): {{GAList/check|y}} b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): {{GAList/check|y}}
3. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
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6. It is broad in its coverage.
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9. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
10. :Fair representation without bias: {{GAList/check|y}}
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12. It is stable.
13. :No edit wars, etc.: {{GAList/check|y}}
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15. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
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19. :Pass/Fail: {{GAList/check|y}}
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• Delink Canadian per MOS:OVERLINK
• Wikilink Peterborough Petes on the first mention in the lead
• Link scouts to Scout (sport) for those unfamiliar with the term

• Wikilink Peterborough Petes and minor hockey to the correct entries on their first mention in the prose
• "to allow him to be eligible to play with the Petes." - I think the words in bold are unneeded
• Wikilink Barrie to the relevant article
• Wikilink points to the appropriate article

• "Dunn led all first year defencemen in the league in scoring with 33 points in 63 games." - Hockeys Future does not mention Dunn scored 33 points. Please find another to go along with Hockeys Future to verify that the information is correct
• "totaling 56 points in 68 games" - not mentioned by the Niagara IceDogs source attached to it. Please use another source that explicitly states this fact
• "where he remained pointless in the 6-0 loss to Team Orr." - please use an en dash in place of the hyphen
• "He also earned a final ranking of 32 overall" - {{Xt|32nd}}
• "to help the team win the series 4-2." - en dash please

• "Approaching his second season as a pro," - {{xt|professional}}
• "He consistently played on the teams" - {{xt|team's}}
• "by once again cracking the Blues lineup to begin the 2018–19 season." - use another formal word instead of cracking
• Wikilink cross-checked for those unfamiliar with ice hockey terminology
• "Dunn recorded a new career high in 'points" - how many points?
• Wikilink Alex Pietrangelo and Colton Parayko
• "St. Louis' first Stanley Cup in their 52-year franchise history." - mykawartha.com doesn't mention it was St. Louis' first Stanley Cup win in its 52-year history but Peterborough Examiner. I suggest citation bundling
• "During the pause in play due to COVID-19," - {{xt|due to the COVID-19 pandemic,}}
• "Dunn competed in a league wide" - {{xt|league-wide}}
• Wikilink Fortnite

• It should be made consistent on whether it should be "The Peterborough Examiner" or "Peterborough Examiner"
• Reference 13 title: ""2014-15 Team Awards" - en dash please
• Reference 14 is missing the author
• Reference 22 should mention that The Canadian Press is the agency that provided the story

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 18:12, 27 May 2020 (UTC)

: {{U|MWright96}}, thanks for the quick review. I believe I have addressed all of your issues. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 20:44, 27 May 2020 (UTC)

::{{reply|HickoryOughtShirt?4}} Now promoting to GA class. I've wikilinked two players who have articles. MWright96 (talk) 06:38, 28 May 2020 (UTC)

:::{{U|MWright96}}, my apologies. I was sure I Wikilinked them but my wifi was cutting in and out and often times I had to refresh. Thanks for the review once again. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 09:17, 28 May 2020 (UTC)