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Talk:Władysław IV Vasa/GA1

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:This review is transcluded from Talk:Władysław IV Vasa/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Ajh1492 (talk) 12:35, 28 July 2011 (UTC)

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DAB Links to fix on ..

:Kopek

:Pike

:Polish-Swedish War (1600-1629) (redirect page)

::Polish–Swedish War (1600–1629)

:Richelieu

:Sheaf

I agree with the following comments from the review tool ...

  • Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article.[?]
  • Avoid including galleries in articles, as per Wikipedia:Galleries. Common solutions to this problem include moving the gallery to [http://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/Main_Page wikicommons] or integrating images with the text.[?]
  • This article may need to undergo summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is United States, then an appropriate subpage would be History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.[?]
  • Please make the spelling of English words consistent with either American or British spelling, depending upon the subject of the article. Examples include: honor (A) (British: honour), organize (A) (British: organise), recognize (A) (British: recognise), realize (A) (British: realise), criticize (A) (British: criticise), isation (B) (American: ization), traveled (A) (British: travelled), travelled (B) (American: traveled), skillful (A) (British: skilful), curb (A) (British: kerb), program (A) (British: programme).
  • Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
  • Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
  • The script has spotted the following contractions: wasn't, didn't, couldn't, if these are outside of quotations, they should be expanded.

Ajh1492 (talk) 15:25, 1 August 2011 (UTC)

:Fixed most. Sheaf seems to me a correct link, PSW need to be turned into an article. I don't see any linked dates, "vague terms of size", nor A/B spelling problems; the script would be much more useful if it were to actually list potential words to check.--Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk 20:47, 8 August 2011 (UTC)

::Does the reviewer have any further issues to note? Wizardman Operation Big Bear 15:11, 27 August 2011 (UTC)

:::I guess we will know soon: [http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User_talk:Ajh1492&diff=prev&oldid=446755766]. But if not, I'd appreciate another reviewer stepping in. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 15:55, 27 August 2011 (UTC)

One more look to make sure I didn't miss anything. Ajh1492 (talk) 15:29, 30 August 2011 (UTC)

  • A couple more observations ...

:any additional details on "He was also heir to one of several Christian claims to the title of King of Jerusalem"?

:a bit of an opinion in the following statement . . . "Likely, the failure of this campaign showed Władysław the limits of royal power in Poland, as major factors for the failure included significant autonomy of the military commanders"

:Lede needs to better summarize the article - one interesting fact left out is his founding of the PLC Navy.

Ajh1492 (talk) 15:34, 30 August 2011 (UTC)

:*Removed the Jerusalem claim, I couldn't find any refers for it (meant to do it before, good catch).

:*True, but it is a cited opinion.

:*True, but PLC navy was minor and didn't last long. Will add the link to it to the lead, why not - but I am not sure what else is missing there. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 18:08, 30 August 2011 (UTC)

:::Since everything checks out now on the reviewer's end, I'll go ahead and pass the article. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 19:43, 4 September 2011 (UTC)