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=Needs Improvement=

Performance

  • Clearly more information could be provided

:* Lead could use more clarity (see later bullet)

  • More headers and sections needed to show variety

:* Expand upon the existing content in the contents (likely through reorganization)

  • Lead is vague with definitions

:* Unclear language

:* Some minor copyedits needed

Human geography

  • The sections need to be more organized

:* Could be through fleshing out sections/combining with other sections

  • Lots of headers following large chunks of text

:* Likely needs reorganization/reformatting of information

=Articles to Work on=

  1. Performance
  2. Comic timing
  3. Human geography

=Feminism in Mexico=

The Problem:

  • The lead is very long and could be condensed with information bumped into other sections/subsections
  • Lead has too much detail
  • Sections could use reorganization
  • Feminist theory paragraph doesn’t make sense
  • List of Notable Figures could be organized instead of being one long list
  • Social movements section is awkward and short

Tasks:

  • Make Second Wave a section under History (3.2) and move the corresponding years to be subsections to correspond with the lead
  • Make new section/subsection for any additional unique info found only in the lead
  • Need to put Feminist theory in relation to theory in Mexico

:* Put a tag to Feminist theory underneath the header

  • Look at History section and look for "issues" to make a new section

:* Put info about indigenous women’s rights

:* Look to see what can be condensed

:* Group events by instances

:* The first three sentences in 1990 section could be condensed, a bit off-topic

  • Ask about groupings of time in the History section on the talk page
  • Move History Section after Feminist Theory, before Gender Rebels

:* Save this for last

  • Look into people listed on the Notable Figures section

:* Model section after that of Feminism in India

:* Cite Wikipedia article source for this info

  • See if Social movements section is able to be moved or integrated into another section
  • Check for bias

=The Sims (video game)=

The Problem:

  • Simplify Expansion packs section to model the Sims 4 Expansion pack section

:* See also the Expansion only subsection in existing article

  • Expansion pack section also needs verification
  • Two sections list similar info and should be reorganized

Tasks:

  • Figure out how to organize Gameplay section

:* Use Mario Party 3 page and StarCraft page as guides

  • Use template for Expansion only subsection to modify current Expansion pack section

:* Briefly research to verify that info in this section is correct

:* Potentially add citations?

:* Compare Sims 4 and StarCraft pages to determine the best course of action

  • Determine approach for reorganization

:* Expansions only falls under Compilations heading rather than Expansion packs

:* See if Expansions only subsection can fall under Expansion packs heading

:* Leave Core game with expansions as the only subsection under Compilations heading

  • Potentially add a Cultural impact section and reorganize information under Reception

:* Use StarCraft page as a reference for this

  • Ports and remakes can be moved to expansions and versions