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Talk:2019 Macau Grand Prix/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Usernameunique (talk · contribs) 22:24, 15 April 2020 (UTC)

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  • {{tq|6.120 km (3.803 mi)}} — The article says 6.2 km
  • Fixed MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • The distance measurements (61.200 km (38.028 mi) and 91.800 km (57.042 mi)) are still based off of the 6.12 distance.
  • Have found a reliable source that states the track is 6.12 km long. MWright96 (talk) 18:24, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • Why is the fastest qualifying lap slower than Vips's time?
  • Because that was set during the qualifying race, where cars had more fuel in them MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • Got it. I was thinking it was fastest lap of the first qualifying period, not of the qualifying race, but now see that it is latter.

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  • Is Bruno Michel worth a red link?
  • Could be but I am not planning to create his article MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • {{tq|upon the indication of the former FIA race director Charlie Whiting after they expressed their wish for the move in May 2019.}} — It's unclear whether this refers to the improvements to the course, or to the introduction of the new car. In any event, this sentence is too long and should be split in two.
  • Done MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • {{tq|that halted Flörsch's car dismantled.}} — Something is off here.
  • Added some words MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • {{tq|foam-protection technologies were enforced}} — were implemented?
  • Done MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • Might want to briefly explain how the DRS works.
  • Done MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • Just out of curiosity, how do drivers determine if they are within 1 second of a car in front of them?
  • It is sensors installed in the ground that determine whether a driver is within a second of each other MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)

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  • {{tq|and activating the virtual safety car procedure.}} — Not sure what this means.
  • It's a procedure to slow the cars without needing the safety car on the track MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • {{tq|David Schumacher, Flörsch, Fittipaldi, Andreas Estner, Lukas Dunner, Olli Caldwell, Alessio Deledda and Max Fewtrell.}} — This isn't a sentence, it's just a list of names.
  • Done MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • {{tq|Caldwell stopped on the track after the exit to Fisherman's Bend corner}} — Why?
  • An engine failure MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • {{tq|An accident for Tsunoda at Maternity Bend turn}} — What happened?
  • There are no further details. MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • Generally speaking throughout the article, I'm not sure you need "turn," "corner," etc. to follow "Maternity Bend," "Fisherman's Bend," etc. Bend already means turn; so for instance, I think you could just say "after the exit to Fisherman's Bend" rather than "after the exit to Fisherman's Bend corner".
  • Done MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • {{tq|Habsburg spun and stopped the session. Beckmann made a braking error for Police corner and crashed.}} — Was Beckmann's crash right after Habsburg's spin, or was there some time between them?
  • Clarified MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • {{tq|to alert drivers to the incident.}} — To what incident?
  • Clarified MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • {{tq|an unsighted Fittipaldi}} — What does this mean?
  • Clarified MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)

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  • {{tq| they deemed him to have reversed in "an unexpected manner" to rejoin the circuit after he ventured onto the Lisboa corner run-off area.}} — This event doesn't seem to be discussed in the above section.
  • Don't think it's appropriate to do that. MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)

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  • {{tq|Hughes put him against a wall.}} — How?
  • Reworded MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)

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{{collapse top|Main race}}

  • {{tq|Lorandi and Sargeant passed him and demoted him from fifth to eighth}} — Someone else must have passed him too, right?
  • Reworded MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • {{tq|Vips collected on-track debris and wore his tyres}} — What does this mean?
  • Reworded MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • What does it mean to brake "correctly"?
  • Removed MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • {{tq|the second to win in Macau and the New Zealand Grand Prix}} — Meaning the second to do both in a season?
  • The second in history MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)

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  • {{tq|The top three drivers appeared on the podium to collect}} — To collect what?
  • Their trophies MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • {{tq|The DRS was supposed to work but it didn’t}} — What happened? There was the sensor error during qualification, but how did it not work during the main race?
  • Clarified MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)

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Overall

  • Looks good, {{u|MWright96}}. Minor comments above. --Usernameunique (talk) 23:54, 15 April 2020 (UTC)
  • {{reply|Usernameunique}} Have addressed several points and have commented where appropriate MWright96 (talk) 08:11, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
  • {{u|MWright96}}, passing now. --Usernameunique (talk) 19:22, 16 April 2020 (UTC)