Talk:Morning/Evening/GA1

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Reviewer: IndianBio (talk · contribs) 10:35, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

Overall a pretty impressive article {{u|Sparklism}}. Some points to be considered before I see if it can be listed as a GA.

• :File:Four Tet - Morning Evening album cover.jpg → should be made 300×300 pixels to comply with WP:NFCC#3b

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• Hebden played some of the records and began experimenting with sampling Indian playback singer Lata Mangeshkar's voice, looping a sample for three days --> Hebden played some of the records and began experimenting by playing a vocal sample of Indian playback singer Lata Mangeshkar for three days,

:*{{done}} I went with "looping" here, to avoid repetition of 'play'. I hope that's OK.

• and decided to break the album into a --> Not "break", replace it with "divide"

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• coupled with complex drum programming[5][4] --> Avoid such instances where the ref 5 is coming before ref 4

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• to emphasise evening's relationship with nightclubs --> add "an" before evening, because you are not referring to evening here as a person, rather any evening's association with the night

:*{{done}} Good spot!

• The song fades out --> link to Fade (audio engineering)

:*{{done}} Good idea :)

• No marketing campaign was used --> Such stub sentences are not desriable, why don't join it with the next sentence as a contrast: "Although no marketing campaign was used, Hebden performed... "

:*{{done}} OK

• from his page --> I assume this is a webpage? if so link it

:* It's linked in the 'external links' section. I didn't see the need to link it in the article, since the cited source #1 covers what is said in the prose. How do you think I should link it - by inserting an external link into the text? Or by using it as a straightforward (primary) source?

• The critical response section is Immaculate

:* Thanks. I had some fantastic help from {{U|Popcornduff}}!

• Remove Guardian news and media from the ref 1 and ref 17 publishers. You don't need to add publisher for same Work parameters

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• Use en-dash in place of normal dash in the reference titles.

:*{{done}} I think I've got all of these now...

• Please note to make online sources with non-original content like AllMusic and Metacritic as non-italicized. Conversely, online sources with original content can remain italicized like Pitchfork Media etc.

:*I've always been unclear about the guidelines for this. AllMusic qualifies as 'original content' though, surely? Not done (yet)

:*{{done}} Actually, I think these are done now.

• Please note that you can actually remove all the publisher parameters, since it is now depreciated.

:*{{done}} I didn't know that. I've left one in for the liner notes cite - should this be removed also? Thanks!

Let me know once they are taken care of. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 13:43, 8 March 2016 (UTC)

:Thanks for an excellent review {{U|IndianBio}}. I've got most of these covered already - will complete the rest shortly. Cheers! — sparklism ^hey! 14:11, 8 March 2016 (UTC)

:Great work. I'm happy to pass the article now. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 16:05, 8 March 2016 (UTC)

::Thanks IndianBio! :) — sparklism ^hey! 16:12, 8 March 2016 (UTC)